ALONE IN LOVE

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ALONE IN LOVE

Alone I sit on the middle stair...

Shocked by the news

That whistled from the depth of my heart

That I am in love..

 

Alone I sit on the sea shore..

Shocked by the awareness..

That I used to deny often..

That I can fall in love

 

Alone I walk in the campus

Shocked by the fact..

That I always deemed as fictitious..

That love can affect my exam grades..

 

Alone I walk in library

Shocked by the discovery of …

That unmatched with logics I trusted..

That a mind in love can not read science

 

Alone I genuflect before Jesus

Shocked by the truth

That I never knew before..

That a mind in love can not recite prayers

 

Alone I brood over Shakespeare

Shocked by what he once declared stoically..

That I never believed earlier..

That a man in love is a mad man!!!

 
Alone I walk towards my love

Confess the imbroglio I am in…

Confess the madness I am in..

Confess the embroilment I am caught in..

 

He smiles, he laughs..

He embraces me, kisses me..

In that charm I forget my imbroglio

I dive deeper, violently

Into the Shakespearean madness

Until reality around me fades..

 

“You can never move against nature..

Moving against nature…

Is the only madness…”

He whispers…!!!!

 

Desperately I stood as a witness

Of a dissolution of our madness

Into one single madness..

As if nobody can divide it

Into two…

 

Reviews

[Ruth]

Awesome wayt to voice love hon!
The heart is such a strong influence!
Absolutely beautiful poem!
xx

[Huggy Bear]

Awesome:)

[Richard Williams]

This is a very interesting poem, imaginative and moving. Some wonderful lines ("...a mind in love cannot recite prayers") and the concluding stanza is the best. I like some of the muscular words like "imbroglio". I think that there are too many exclamation points, however, and that, "He whispers..." would be more effective without any. But aside from that, this is good and the reference to Shakespeare is very neat. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you described Shakespearean madness. Something we will never understand. The need and want of us humans leave the doctors confused and lost. A very good story. I like how you took me with you in the day of a life. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[indu]

you think from a magical, divine point of view.. every subject looks afresh in your hands.. and i truly admire ur works.. keep writing :)

[lavina k.]

Love is a powerful feature in a person's life.
I can relate myself to this poem because i was a person who never thought or would that someone will come into my life and will make it so beautiful.
But one day he came and changed my life.
That love is all about when you thought you never need it, it comes in front and will make you love and when you need it the most, it disappears.
Amazing, beautiful, remarkable!!
Thanks for sharing!!!!!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love is a force that moves our interior mountains~ it effects every step and breath and expression when the love is true~ beautiul~ wistful~ much enjoyed~ =)~

[Dream Weaver]

I think you're in love :) because sometimes love makes us
a little giddy when we're in it...Nicely done Jeny...

[Buddhistboy73]

Ok, so I like to point out the things that kinda grate on me first,then review. So, the line about library grated...maybe it is missing something from the flow? Also, I don't think this poem needed the final stanza.
Ok, so that aside, I found this to be a beautiful write, well thought out and it moved me deeply, and not many on here do. The penultimate stanza is fantastic...I loved it...:)
Loved the comparison with Shakespeare too...and the repetition of "alone"...
look forward to reading more of your words on here....:)

[.]

Your 5th and 6th stanza were pure magic for me..this is a fantastic description of the delights of falling in love and being unable to function because of how over whelming it can be..get married, it's soon pass LOL :)