IS DADDY FIBBING?

A poem

IS DADDY FIBBING?

 

No flowers in my house

Ask me why..

No garden in my courtyard!!

 

No garden in my courtyard

Ask me why…

No space in my courtyard!!

 

No space in my courtyard

Ask me why

Daddy’s car is too big..

 

Daddy’s car is too big

Ask me why

Our family is so huge

 

Our family is so huge

Ask me why

Daddy loved mummy so much

 

Daddy loved mummy so much

Ask me why

He says she is his garden

 

He says she is her garden

I ask him… How?

 

Her eyes are like beetles

Her teeth are like jasmines

Her lips exudes honey.

Her smiles spread fragrance..

Her cheek is red as roseflower..

Her gazes are lusty as hibiscus..

Her breasts are tender as lotus..

Her words...., as mesmerizing as a flower

In the hands of a cupid!!!

 

Saying this dad laughed aloud

I too laughed… though

I couldn’t make out

Garden that mummy is..

Is Daddy fibbing?

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

This is such a sweet poem! Loved it! I love how it completely turns around by the end. Daddy sounds like he loves Mummy very much! A very happy, upbeat poem!

[Daniel Gardner]

this is very cute. very well written!

[Ruth]

This is another beautiful write love, such innocence here!
Beautifully captured!
xx

[lavina k.]

Sho sho cute and sho sho shweet...
I mean i loved it a lot
This is beautifully written.
Well composed!!!
Remarkable!!!

[Charles]

you captured innocence very nicely here. the speaker knows the words but not the deeper meanings. Well done

[Holly O'Brien]

Oh the uniqueness....how I love it lol....the repetitious tone throughout the beginning of the poem allows me to picture a very young speaker...perhaps a child, trying to describe their story and emotions about this particular matter. When she draws to the conclusion that her mother is the garden...I just love the way it unfolds

"Her eyes are like beetles
Her teeth are like jasmines
Her lips exudes honey.
Her smiles spread fragrance..
Her cheek is red as roseflower..
Her gazes are lusty as hibiscus..
Her breasts are tender as lotus..
Her words...., as mesmerizing as a flower
In the hands of a cupid!!!"

Again when the speaker asks "is daddy fibbing?" one can understand that it could only be a child asking these things in such a manner :))....but this is just my interpretation!! ....great write!!

[Huggy Bear]

Great piece here:)

[Black Cat Fever]

This is cute and fantastic and I love it!

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Cheeky XD So sweet, as if told trough the words of a child... Once again a very good poem, I really enjoyed reading this.

Wow!!!! Amazing!!! I honestly don't know what else to say. So pretty! So sweet! So lovely! It made me smile ^_^