I WOULD LIKE TO BUT

For devon's contest

I WOULD LIKE TO…

     BUT……

I am a village girl

Dreaming of mansions in town

Though my hovel is my heaven

 

I would like to see

The night turning into day

In the glaring lights of the city

Though I can never leave

The moonlit night of my village

 

I would like to see

The bar girls dancing

Though my feet’s rhythm is  

The folklore my dad taught

 

I would like to be a friend

Of some town boy..

Who will teach me what is new…

But I will marry only

A village boy..

Who can tend my cattle

And talk with my parrot

 

Those mansions stood..

Oh..!! too close, to allow…

Any space for my cattle

To graze, romp and breath…

 

Above those glaring lights

I see a dark sky…

As if abode of dark murky secrets

I feel insecure..

 

The busy crowd…

Each draped in indifference

Seemed so far from each other…

Though appeared so close

And thickly packed…

 

I am afraid I will miss

What my soul needed..

The freshness of a green life

In my village…

Look lol…

There isn’t a single grain..

Of grass for my cattle!!!

 

 

Reviews

[Buddhistboy73]

Really enjoyed this, as I am a village boy who moved to the city years ago, and will always feel the pull of the village. Your words are great here, and you portray the emotions well...I can relate! Great write, and I hope you have the courage to move to the city (even if just to try it on)...:)

[Tate Morgan]

You have answered your own question wanting what you do not have is mans ultimATE CURSE

[N.E.T.]

WOw! This is a very cool, creative, abstract, and original poem - I like this a lot - I am very happy with this piece - and with this contemporary style.

[Huggy Bear]

Sweet and soft. Good job:)

[Daniel Gardner]

Very pure and not hard to read.

[Adelia Alighieri]

This is so pure, I love the way it continues from one pace to another. Well done!

[lavina k.]

Awesome, colorful, wondrous piece of your work.
Thanks for sharing!!!!!

[Randolf Ramos]

This is a poem of great significance! We can live a happy life not with flickering beauties of cities, but living through simplicity! Living a busy life entangles our mind.
in simplicity we could generate lots of ideas!

Great write
Keep on writing.

[Richard Williams]

A skilled freshness in these words, with colorful image and unique detail. I like the reference to cattle and parrot. Some cool lines, like the third. Kudos.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a dreaming soul plucked from the branches of Time and cradled beautifully in your poem~ giving her substance~ bringing her alive~