MY BABY COME BACK

A poem...

MY BABY, COME BACK

 

This grief may give way…

To forgetfulness..

But it will be there..

In the abysses of my mind

That will come up to breathe in

Fresh air once in a day

When I walk past your room..

 

When I dunk my self

In excruciating pain..

The toys scattered around the floor

Will smile in apathy..

The toy vehicles frozen

For lack of your touch..

Too may follow thy path

To death…

 

My baby come back…

Without you…

I am a dead toy..

Longing for a caress, a touch..

From your budding fingers..

 

My baby come back..

Your dead toys…

Emanates the smell of a death

That will never embrace me…

But, the stink of my grief…

Mating with the smell of death

Chokes me to the fringes

Of a tantalizing death…

That will never embrace me..

Just as it embraced you…

My baby…come back…

 

Reviews

[Adelia Alighieri]

Very nice. I like it.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words are filled with such an overwhelming sadness.. a deep grief in loss... oh... this was so painful to read... filled with emotion... hard to finish..

[the_stoic]

i read what shaneberry has to say and of course i know that this is out of sheer imagination (hope this isn't getting personal) . but the purpose to point this out is the fact that it's really credible to have thought about the pain and anguish keeping yourself in the place of a mother who indeed has lost a child . you always take up themes and topics which aren't usually dealt with or written on . and just a word of praise - the minuscule errors have all vanished now :)

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

very powerfully the pain shows...yet there is a will to overcome it....inspiringly real. great write

vincent
www.esprit.stblogs.com

[ShaneBerry]

wow! now this i did like, it showed true emotion in every stanza, did you actually loose a child? may i ask?
or is this from imagintion, either way it is a beautiful/sad write