SEE MY TEARS

A poem.....about a friendship

SEE MY TEARS

 

 

Fascinated me..

Responded to my needs

Insured me against insecurities

Ensured his presence in need

Never am I lonely

Dear friend I love you

 

Found myself in the mirror you are

Reflection of me talked the truth I am

Inspired by that I grew in dimensions

Even universities fail to recognize and exhort

No mother can guide and direct me

Dear friend, into the world you opened for me.

 

For a long time I sat

Reading the saga of our friendship

Immersed in wonder of your love for me

Embracing the security I felt even in your absence

Nodding to the prick of conscience all time

Doubting if I gave you what you deserve as my friend….

 

 

Friendship day came…

Repeats itself monotonously every year..

I am here, ask me what you want

Everything that I possess is a gift for you

Never ever shall I claim as mine except this love

Dear friend, for you…for you only..

See my tears….!!

 

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

This is a very well structured acrostic. It truly "spells out" (no pun intended) the sentiments and the train of thought of a true friendship. Any friend would love to read such a poem.
The only thing that might detract a bit are the letters coloured red, but I can see them used for effect.
Besides that, he line, "Even universities fail to recognize and exhort", is a bit weak in my opinion.

Well done.

[Tracie D'Angelo]

Like everyone else, I'm not a fan of these kind of poems, but I really liked this one! It flowed so nicely despite the first letters used! I loved the line "Found myself in the mirror you are"! Too cool! Wish I had written that one myself! :) Awesome poem! Well done!

[Ruth]

Loving the structure love :) Awesome!
A great poem, friendship in a unique manner!
The ebb and flow contained, great work
xx

[Bette]

wonderfully written love the set up.. well done

[A.Lee]

Jeny, this is absolutely beautiful. Very strong and so very true. Definitely one of my favorites of yours. I loved this stanza:

"Found myself in the mirror you are
Reflection of me talked the truth I am
Inspired by that I grew in dimensions
Even universities fail to recognize and exhort
No mother can guide and direct me
Dear friend, into the world you opened for me."

[Huggy Bear]

Powerful indeed:)

[Holly O'Brien]

awww....very nice!! I think this one was very unique and meaningful...and I love the way each stanza works in sequence...good write!!

[ShaneBerry]

normally i do not like these poems, but that is because ppl use the same thing over and over again, this is different, i liked this! and the red coloring seemed to make it far more dramatic

[Daniel Gardner]

you did a good job as usual. You have made me like these types of poems because you are so inventive with them. Good job.

[Dream Weaver]

To tell you the truth Jeny these are my least favorite kind
of poems, the kind that spells out the word and you keep
building off each letter..But.....You did a very nice version
of it here. I do like this because it has substance direction
as well as meaning..So I must say nicely done...