RAIN RAIN COME SOON

Dedicate this poem to farmers who committed suicide as the failure of seasonal rain affected their only means of livelihood….Agriculture…

RAIN RAIN COME SOON

 

Restlessly I wait for

A rain that will quench me

I am sure it will come

Never will it cheat me

 

Rarely do I think of a drought

All that news papers forecast

In their chamber they sat

Nay Sayers, the meteorologists

 

Repair my abode hey, wind

Adieu to you hey, poverty

Impish night, welcome the clouds

No time is left to receive down pours

 

Rain will come rain must come

After all, summer has left

It can not resist its turn

Nobody has ever defeated instincts.

 

Rain will come, rain must come

All those drops, sky can hold no more

Into my field sky will explode soon

Never will allow my little ones to die of poverty

 

Rarely colorful are my dreams

Azure is the sole source of hope

Installed my life and blood in agriculture

Nothing is new other than a good harvest

I am nothing but rain ,mud and sky…

Nothing can stop my longing…

God knows what a farmer want…

 

Rain rain come soon….

Author's Note

Dedicate this poem to farmers who committed suicide as failure of seasonal rain affected their only means of livelihood….Agriculture…

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This tribute poem really catches the mood of a farmer whose very livelihood is dependent on the vagaries of the weather.

Linguistically there is quite a lot to celebrate in this poem. You have milked the meteorological lexis quite dry with all the terms we might expect - 'quench', 'forecast', 'clouds' and 'drops'. The list is endless and shows how rich the our language is for the type of weather the English people are always so happy to grumble about.

You've made good use of personification in describing the narrators relationship with the weather. He is speaking directly to the wind when he says, 'wind adieu to you'. The effect of this is to make him appear more vulnerable. When we read this the absence of rain is perhaps not due to climatic vagaries but to a personal slight.

The one aspect of this poem that I felt was lacking was in the structure. You clearly have a lot you want to say and you've got some lovely imagery in here. I'm particularly struck by the elegance of the phrase, 'Azure is the sole source of hope'. However, there's a certain awkwardness and lack of structure in the poem as a whole. It's certainly not a piece of formatted prose but it's not what I'd see as being a fully rounded poem. I'm sure one of our resident poets can put it much more elegantly than I just have.

There's a lot going for this poem. It's made me aware of an issue I'd not heard of before and it has some very nice imagery. If you perhaps tweak the structure, or look at that in future projects I can see some very successful poems coming from your pen.

[the_stoic]

i really like the way you take up certain issues and write on them ! this one was just similar . the only thing that's lacking is the arrangement . keep writing :)

[Ruth]

Beautifully dedicated hon! A fragile poem that shows the pain and needing of the farmers!
Wonderful
xx

[Dinesh Sairam]

"Rain will come rain must come
After all, summer has left
It can not resist its turn
Nobody has ever defeated instincts."

This is my favorite stanza. It contains some subtlety and lucidity.

To be nerdy, there's a theory in Economic that says "Agriculture will be the prime occupation in under-developed countries. When it is fully developed, the GDP contribution from agriculture will fall drastically and food grains have to be purchased from other under-developed countries. This is always balanced. Hence, there will be no day in future where all the countries are either developed or under-developed" :) (Just refreshing my mind, lol).

A nice piece :)

Keep writing.

[Dream Weaver]

Wow! I'm glad I didn't have my reading glasses on....
A beautiful sentiment and also awareness to the
plight of our farmers...Great write Jeny...

[.]

"Nothing is new other than a good harvest
I am nothing but rain ,mud and sky…
Nothing can stop my longing…
God knows what a farmer want…"

{this is a very creative poem--i love the colorfully worded imagery}

james:-)

[Shalini Dinesh]

the poem is good enough but i have a doubt on why you most write an acrostic poem like
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etc, most of your poems are like that, why don't you try some different forms too, its fun writing, keep writing..

[Ed Hart]

it is the inner storms and rain that you thirst for

[Coyote Poetry]

Water is our most precious item. Without water we can't grow food. I hope you get rain soon. I put it in my prayers for a good rain for your home today. A very good poem. You show concern for the people who need help.
Coyote

[Wicahpi]

After 4 years of drought, we finally have moisture that has
been making up for it. Nicely done :)