YOU CAN HIDE NO MORE

Wrote ....looking at yellow Rose flowe

YOU CAN HIDE NO MORE

What did the sun tell to you?

In the morning I saw both of you

Smiling at each other

What did the wind do to you?

In the morning I saw both of you

Nodding at each other

What did the night give to you?

In the morning I saw both of you

Dreaming of each other

What did silence do to you?

In the morning I saw both of you

Meditating of each other

What did the twilight present to you?

In the morning I saw you….

Wearing his evening robe..

You can no more hide

Anything from me…

My dear rosé flower!!!

Tell me everything!!!!!

Reviews

[the_stoic]

is this an ode to rose ?? liked the presentation

the way you have encapsulated every element is wonderful

[Huggy Bear]

Great write;)

[Dev]

This is a nice write. The way you have used imagery is very good. I would suggest that you add "the" in front of every object.. like THE sun, THE wind.. Since you are personifying these objects it sounds better that way. Other than that I don't think I have much to review. nice write.

[Ed Hart]

assuming that your meditation on the morning rose summoned other memories, well said

[Dinesh Sairam]

Hmm.. Nice poem. If not only for the refrain... :) Keep writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting tale. I like the flow and the story in your words. You weaved a beautiful poem. I like the ending a lot. A excellent poem.
Coyote