FIGHTING FOR LOVE

Wrote for a contest

FIGHTING FOR LOVE

 

Sister said “I like him”.

I too said “I too love him”

Sister said “mine is stronger”

I said “mine is more sincere”

 

Sister called me a liar

I called her pretender

Sister stared in anger

I scowled at her in scorn

 

“I wont allow you to touch him” sister.

“I wont allow you even to peep him” me.

“You are not meant for his happiness” sister

“You are meant for his disaster” me.

 

Finally she took a stone

Tried to pelt me

I grabbed a handful of dry sand

My aim was to blind her

 

Finally he came

“What are you fighting for?”

He asked painfully, anxiously.

What happened?

 

“Father I love you” sister said

“Father I love you” said me.

“I love you” father said.

“I love you” father cried.

 

He kissed on four cheeks

Two of me, two of my sister

 

I kissed on four cheeks

Two of my father, two of my sister

 

Sister kissed on four cheeks

Two of my father, two of me…!!!

Reviews

[Nianque]

That was a great twist. I thought they were fighting over a guy, great ending ! Thumbs up !

[SilentDreamer]

Oh, what a great poem. At the beginning I thought they were teenagers and were fighting over a guy. And then the dad comes. Came as a bit of a shocker. Awesome job.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Reminds me of when i did the same with my sisters.
Very loving ... when in the end they all kiss and love each other as we should

Peace

[Samantha Young]

Lmao, this reminds me of my sister and I fighting. Awesome!

[Ian]

Loved it because it reminds me fighting with my brothers to see who is the better child exc... great poem

[Daniel Gardner]

I like this poem you did a great job petraying two different people with one thing in common.

[Broken.buddy]

That was wonderful write.Never hurting the flow, neither of the poem nor the twist behind it.I love this one.!!

[Holly O'Brien]

awwww....this was something unique to me...pretty straight forward but it was presented in a different way...

[Huggy Bear]

Amazing piece:)

[Livenrite]

Woah! not expecting that! Well done:) Thanks for sharing.