AN UNWED LITTLE BOY

Dilemma of a boy who had to witness his father's marriage. A prose poem.

AN UNWED LITTLE BOY

 

What is the need of this Bow-Tie..

An unwed little boy stood in the middle of guests

In the church, wondering about ties unnecessarily

 

Hymn reached till the hymen of his ears…

Failed to oscillate and enter into it….

Floating in the air for sometime it returned

To the prayer book in the hands of priest

 

Thoughts about unnecessary ties flailed a made up joy

Smiles like butterflies lingered on the lips of an ephemeral glee

 

It was only yesterday his mother left home..

Why his father brings a new mother, while,

Water cascading down from his eyes has not been stopped yet…

By some forgetfulness that time may bring…

 

Reviews

[etxcp]

Awesome write! :)

[Honey]

I would like to give you a million kudos because I wanted to enter this contest but for the life of me could not figure out a poetic way to use "oscillate". You have managed to make it flow! I really liked the subject matter too; by the end, I had a full mental picture and it was like watching a movie. Great job!

[Helen Crutchett]

Unique and wonderful write. Much enjoyed! Thank you for submitting this to Tovli's contest. ~ Helena

[Nianque]

loving the use of color for emphasis. children notice more than most people realize.

[Tovli]

nicely done--a great little story! innocent and childlike in its presentation. tovli

[Angel Veselinov]

Good luck in the contest :) Really good write nice use of those words. You have my vote :) !

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. Children are more wise then we think. Your story was strong and to the point. You wrote a complete story in so few words. You are a very good writer. I like the ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[WriterSki7]

Ah yes. I applaude you in your proper catagorization of this poem. This poem has nice flow and you use a rather well-gathered vocabulary. Regardless, this was a very good write. It captures the emotion very well.

[Huggy Bear]

Great write:)

[indu]

i agree with the 2 revies below..especially that u used the given words in a perfect way