WHO TOLD YOU ARE NOT LONELY?

A different way of looking at loneliness

           WHO TOLD YOU ARE NOT LONELY?

 

How true this Island is !!!

When I come to know

That each piece of earth in universe

Small or large

Is surrounded by water

 

How beautiful this aloneness is!!!!

When I come to know that

I came to this world

Alone with an empty hand

 

How meaningful this loneliness is!!!

When I come to know

That every relationship

Is only a mask

That covers lonely hearts

 

How wise my lonely voyage is!!!!

When I come to know

Each will have to enter his destiny

Alone, with his conscience

As his only companion

 

Look above, below, left, right.

Who told you are not lonely?

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Lorraine]

It's a unique perspective, indeed. Instead of looking at loneliness in its usual sad connotation, you've shown it as something inevitably part of everything. The metaphors are very applicable and imaginative.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[the_stoic]

no one told me i aint lonely .. i just accept i am !! the metaphor of islands was a nice thought !

[Yellow]

Are you saying that we are enevatibly alone?
Thanks for submitting!
-Yellow

[Eagle Cruagh]

Everything about this poem is
wholesome, neat, clear.
One does not have to search for
meaning, or plough through symbols.
You have even made the font sharp,
large and clear.

This is the nicest, easiest poem to read.

Thank You

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Coyote Poetry]

You are correct. We come into the world alone and leave the same way. Poem is told with great skill. Each point adding to a strong conclusion. Who told you? You are not lonely? A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Samuel Ferris]

ew, also, rilke, the book of hours(love poems to god), i think you might like.

[Samuel Ferris]

i Think there is an honesty in you writing, which is the most essential element. However, i believe there is still room to improve grammar. Its ok to break grammatical rules as long as you sell them. Im not sold on a few.
"Who told you are not lonely?"
this statement is ambiguous, which can be great if it suites a purpose within the poem. Im not sure if you mean "who revealed that you are not lonely"
Is it supposed to be irony, like, "who said you are not lonely"
Im not quite sure, and i dont know if that is the right feeling for the end of this piece.
"That each piece of earth in universe"
this is much more acceptable. It should be
"that each piece of earth in the universe"
"the", however, is an acceptable deletion as long as you know what you are doing.

overall good piece, i wonder if you have ever read rabindranath tagore.