YOU ARE MY LUCK

Exploring role of LUCK in our life. Written for a competition

                                  YOU ARE MY LUCK

 

          “I do not believe in luck” Today their conversation centered on luck.

  “But I do” she said casually.

“It is a means of escape from responsibilities” he put forward an argument like statement.

“But not always” she said

“For example?” he needed clarification

“Example? Its very close to me ,within my reach” her smiling eyes cast down.

“What is it?”

“Its you” she paced near him, looking down always.

He paused. She paused. He kissed her on the cheek.

                  As they reached near car they saw key of car missing. He went in search of key. She waited. After half an hour he returned.

“Very unfortunate” he sighed.

She smiled. “Escape from responsibility?”

For a split of a second he traveled inward, and then smiled in awareness.

              After making arrangements to get a spare key, they decided to walk along the shore for some more time.

They walked. Moonless night seemed to be giving life to many secrets and unfamiliar needs of their souls. They indulged in all of them relishing the spontaneous ambience nature arranged for them.

In the peek moments she whispered in his ears, into his heart “You are my luck”

             When they came back, car was not there.

 

 

Reviews

[Dev]

Nice.. !! I really liked reading it.. I'll try to help with the mistakes (am not really good at it though so the final call is yours )

1. It is a means of escape from responsibilities .. :: "a" and "means" dont go together.

2. he needs clarification :: not sure but shouldnt it be "he needed clarification" ?

3. Its very close to me within my reach :: This means the same.. So can it be "Its very close to me. It's within my reach." ?

4. As they reached near car they saw key of car missing. :: As they reached near "their" car, they saw the key missing OR As they reached near their car they say it's key missing

5.For a split of a second he traveled inward, and then smiled in awareness. :: For a split second, he travelled inwards.

6. After making arrangements to get spare key :: to get "A" spare key

7. Moonless night seemed to be giving life to many secret and unfamiliar needs of their souls. :: The Moonless night seemed to be giving life to many secrets and unfamiliar needs of their souls.

8.They indulged in all of them relishing spontaneous ambience nature arranged for them. :: relishing THE ambience

9. In the peek moments she whispered in his ears, into his heart “You are my luck” :: peak

10. When they came back, car was not there. :: THE car

[Nautili]

great ending! How unlucky is that! Funny and witty.