The Kelpie - v.2010

A cautionary tale.

A kelpie is beautiful, yes,
But travelers should take heed.
This horsey's never one to tame
Nor to ever call your steed.

For beneath his glistening coat
Lies a stomach full of bones
Picked as bare as his cold, black heart,
Filled with adventurers' moans.

Now see his glimmering green eyes -
So intelligent and sure! -
They glow like lanterns in the dark
To lead you into the moor.

Let's open up the kelpie's mouth,
Although it's shocking to see,
Dripping teeth of a sanguine-red
Stained by atrocities.

Now take apart the creature's skull,
In his pulsing brain you'll find
Numerous thoughts malevolent -
But only a few benign.

The kelpie is a dazzling beast;
To the river he will lure.
He'd love to watch your entrails float -
A delightful sight, for sure.

Graceful words won't sway this monster,
Nor will arguments or pleas,
And so I warn you once again,
Cautious traveler: take heed!

Author's Note

The word 'horsey' in the first verse is not changing, so please quit telling me to change it, everyone. Otherwise, tear it up, guys. This is the second draft, written after a year's break from this piece. Honest, helpful reviews would be wonderful:]