Gone Are The Days....

I wrote this in 2008, when I had to leave home n my friends for permanent job outside Delhi....

Gone are the days when we used to have fun,
Now-a-days everyone in life is on run..

Life brings many twist-n-turn,
& We don't know where we will finally Burn..

Till we are together lets make everyone feel,
That there is no other Heaven than a good Friendships Deal...

While you are reading this the precious time I steal,
will be remembered like a Healthy Meal..!!

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think ?

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

I liked it smile except for the last line...it didn't fit the scheme and not sure what you mean...mean is an adjective and I think you're using it as a noun. Plus shouldn't it rhyme with steal? Just asking, not trying to be too critical...
Like I stated, the message is meaningful and germane ....we all should slow down to smell the roses and we also should make a greater effort to treat everyone with kindness and respect.
allen

[smilempsn]

Oopps... ThankU for pointing out that.. its actually 'Healthy Meal' :) :)
Will edit n correct it rite away...

Thank a lot again for a gud critical review :)

[Allen Smuckler]

My pleasure smile....and
you're are most certainly welcome
allen

[smilempsn]

Corrected it... :)
Hope now it makes a bit of sense :)

[Allen Smuckler]

voila :)

[smilempsn]

^-^

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. This sounded like a song other than a poem...:)

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. ThankU :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Talal Hussain]

zabardast yr...nice start :-)

[smilempsn]

ThankU :)
It means a lot...

[Just Kim]

I like it, like the rhyme and flow.
I know the feelings you presented

[smilempsn]

ThankU for being the first one to review and appreciate me to continue my journey here :)