Gone Are The Days....

I wrote this in 2008, when I had to leave home n my friends for permanent job outside Delhi....

Gone are the days when we used to have fun,
Now-a-days everyone in life is on run..

Life brings many twist-n-turn,
& We don't know where we will finally Burn..

Till we are together lets make everyone feel,
That there is no other Heaven than a good Friendships Deal...

While you are reading this the precious time I steal,
will be remembered like a Healthy Meal..!!

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think ?

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

I liked it smile except for the last line...it didn't fit the scheme and not sure what you mean...mean is an adjective and I think you're using it as a noun. Plus shouldn't it rhyme with steal? Just asking, not trying to be too critical...
Like I stated, the message is meaningful and germane ....we all should slow down to smell the roses and we also should make a greater effort to treat everyone with kindness and respect.
allen

[smilempsn]

Oopps... ThankU for pointing out that.. its actually 'Healthy Meal' :) :)
Will edit n correct it rite away...

Thank a lot again for a gud critical review :)

[Allen Smuckler]

My pleasure smile....and
you're are most certainly welcome
allen

[smilempsn]

Corrected it... :)
Hope now it makes a bit of sense :)

[Allen Smuckler]

voila :)

[smilempsn]

^-^

[A.E. Surdam]

Playful and catchy. Great write.

[smilempsn]

ThankU for the review Amber ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

Gosh! Man you got better understanding of words then i do :P
Nice piece of work.. loved it
Simply loved the Rhymes..
Will go for more of you artistic work....

- Cheers!!!
Vikrantsingh

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. ThankU for those kind words ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

No problem, I mostly no review.. in-depth as i don't have proper understanding of english. But I make sure, I don't pass any unhealthy comments on someones hard work :)

[smilempsn]

..hehe... :)
means it was not so good.. u were just being polite ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

ℓσℓ no that's not the case, zyada dimag laga raha hai tu *rolling eyes*

[smilempsn]

:| :| :| 'raha hun mein'

[Vikrantsingh]

raha hun mein?

[smilempsn]

hmm You wrote those 'raha hun' Gender mistaken line for me ;) :P
All is PAST now..!! ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

Oh sorry my mistake :P

[smilempsn]

its ok now ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

GM

[smilempsn]

;) ..shubhratrii.. :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol so early :D

[smilempsn]

I can say same rite ;)
coz I read GM so late :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Oh.. My apologies

[smilempsn]

:P jaoo muaaff kiyaa B-)

[Akshat♥]

you have written a different kind of write ..
I really enjoyed it..
it is so positive :)
i hope those days will come again soon and make u happy even more than last time;)
nice color used here...sweet!!

[smilempsn]

well well well... I might soon u negative here... But I know, the time which is lost never comes back..!!
If we get some happy moments too after that, it cannot be compared to anything we had in our past... :) :)

But thatz just what I believe.. ^-^

[Akshat♥]

i agree with u somewhat...but dear life goes on :)
think positive...it is just a start..you will get lot more happy moments:)

[smilempsn]

:)

[Aiden]

This put a smile on my face. I envy poetry or any art like this. I can never seem to write such whimsical pieces. I liked it. Merci.

[smilempsn]

^-^ Thanks a ton ^-^

[AlexValkyrie]

Simply put you are very talented. I hope you continue writing for a long time.

[smilempsn]

ThankU Alex :)

[Megan A B]

I like it! It's mournful in a way but positive too. Almost like hardships being taken in good spirits - and reading the tagline at the top it seems as though that what you were wanting to convey? If so very well done indeed! Thank you for sharing this :)

[smilempsn]

Thank a lot for reading and reviewing it :)

[Megan A B]

It' was a delight to read! :)

[smilempsn]

^-^

[Melissa]

There is humor among the words, but also a very beautiful plea to enjoy the light-heartedness of life. It is a joy to remember how to have fun. What comes so natural in youth, is often times forgotten in maturity.

Enjoyed this.

[smilempsn]

ThankU for the review :)

[tina.anderson]

Nice!

[smilempsn]

ThankU :)

[jdr / Jennifer]

Very nice write- wonderful flow about it. I enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing.

[smilempsn]

ThankU for reviewing it :)

[jdr / Jennifer]

Thank you for writing it ;)

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. :)