Gone Are The Days....

I wrote this in 2008, when I had to leave home n my friends for permanent job outside Delhi....

Gone are the days when we used to have fun,
Now-a-days everyone in life is on run..

Life brings many twist-n-turn,
& We don't know where we will finally Burn..

Till we are together lets make everyone feel,
That there is no other Heaven than a good Friendships Deal...

While you are reading this the precious time I steal,
will be remembered like a Healthy Meal..!!

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think ?

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

I liked it smile except for the last line...it didn't fit the scheme and not sure what you mean...mean is an adjective and I think you're using it as a noun. Plus shouldn't it rhyme with steal? Just asking, not trying to be too critical...
Like I stated, the message is meaningful and germane ....we all should slow down to smell the roses and we also should make a greater effort to treat everyone with kindness and respect.
allen

[smilempsn]

Oopps... ThankU for pointing out that.. its actually 'Healthy Meal' :) :)
Will edit n correct it rite away...

Thank a lot again for a gud critical review :)

[Allen Smuckler]

My pleasure smile....and
you're are most certainly welcome
allen

[smilempsn]

Corrected it... :)
Hope now it makes a bit of sense :)

[Allen Smuckler]

voila :)

[smilempsn]

^-^

[Pryde Foltz]

I read this and feel content. Absolutely, it are those moments when you slow down with the ones you love that make life worth living. Great write.

[smilempsn]

ThankU for the kind words Pryde :) :)

[MOON]

Lovely poignant write , love the layout and how you presented the theme. Friendships are valuable.

[smilempsn]

ThankU MOON for the vist and review :)

[Marie]

I kind of liked the last line. I remember really good meals I've had...though not the healthy ones (I'm not a healthy eater).

[smilempsn]

ThankU for the visit and review Marie :)
Well with friends I don't think we eat healthy food ever :P.. unless our mom's pack some healthy stuff :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i like how you shift from sadness to happiness so quickly...

good poem

[smilempsn]

ThankU Cascara :)

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...Enjoyed reading your words...Rose:)

[smilempsn]

ThankU for your visit and review Syber Roser :)

[SyberRose]

haa syber roser..

[smilempsn]

Oppsiee.. Sorry ........
Syber Rose :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

in the crowded train...who will pay the bill?

[smilempsn]

the passenger .. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

no...make the TC pay it and watch the fun...so much for a meal...and that to free

[smilempsn]

n who is it even possible ?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oh...simple just buy a train and try this game

[smilempsn]

buy a train ?? :-o or a train ticket :-o

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

no seriux buy a train from an old junkyard...shud nroad on an open praiire ot cost much...one engine one compartment shud do...lay your own rail and charge people a smile each for a ride...or a meal...to seat by your side capn

[smilempsn]

:) :) nice idea.... :)
well I guess you came here for chit chatting :P

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yeh i was bored thats why i sat on the train top and hitched a chitchat ride...see no tc...no fee...and who wants a meal when the rides for free

[smilempsn]

:-o :-o n what if wind blows u off :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oh...i am wearing magnetic shoes

[smilempsn]

ohh.. then beware of the electronic lines that travel above trains :P

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oh....but i need them to power my electromagnetic helmet...which in turn powers my shoes which in turn power my electronic equipmnt at home using tesla-coil wireless tecnology

[smilempsn]

Oohh.. so u are wifi-ed connected with all the technologies at ur home :P
well great then.... Just beware of Rain... coz water n electric things, don't go hand in hand B-)

[smilempsn]

needa go...GudNite...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes to u 2

[Adri Moolman]

I really like it

[smilempsn]

ThankU Adri ^-^

[Relic]

Until you start reaching your forties and fifties you don't realize how true this is. Alas, youth--as they say--is wasted on the young.

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. Good for me, I realized that in my 20's itself ;) ^-^ :)

[Relic]

It becomes more apparent as your friends start dying off. :(

[smilempsn]

hmm.... :( :)

[Rogue]

I love the thoughts, upbeat tempo and message in this.
It is a piece to make one truly smile. :)
Lovely work!

[smilempsn]

ThankU for the review Rogue ^-^

[Rogue]

You are welcome. :)