Spear Heading The Ugly

To all those who have suffered cruelty by someone else's hand. Redemption is coming.

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Pierce my heart? Naaaah, That dumb thing left long ago

All that's left is a rotting hole

 

Killed or raped you don't care

All I can do is vacantly stare

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Wont be happy until i am dead

Who will you dehumanise in my stead

 

S**t, w***e...what the f**k did I do?

Im guilty of nothing but being bound to you

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Keep on pushing me until Im heavy as lead

Go...Be king in your demon filled head

 

Punishing me does it make you feel like a man

I care not where it all began

 

Gods got me and the devils got you...One of these days he will be coming for you

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

Reviews

[Z.A. Cox]

I love emotion in poems/lyrics whether it be positive or negative as long as you can feel it when you read/listen/see it. I don't know if this is a complement or not but from me it is... it reminds me of something the vocalist from Lamb Of God would write (Randy Blyth). I like it!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thank you so much...l was certainly under the spell of some strong feelings when I wrote this. Glad to know that it transcends to the reader!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Powerful write!...This is stunning! I felt empowered as I read this. You have written this with conviction my friend! Excellent work!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Im blown away by your review, thank you so much for your support Robbie!

[zainul]

Wonderful write.
This statement is worth quoting:"Gods got me and the devils got you...One of these days he will be coming for you"
Repetition enhanced the beauty and strength of the piece:
"Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray"

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thank you so much for your insightful review!

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
I am very impressed by your awesome journey in the realm of literature.

[EileenMarie]

Nicely done......could be a spoken piece, I can hear it :)
It reminds me of the proverb, No weapon formed against thee shall prosper, something I say often when confronted by a cruel person and unfortunately there are plenty :(
Great job!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thank you for your kind review and the proverb!

[Walker Andreasen]

Wonderful. Wonderful indeed! This poem was written so naturally. More like you were speaking it, not writing it. This was an excellent poem indeed. If I could cross-reference this with one of my poems, it would have to be Messiah Complex. I enjoyed your poem! Thank you for sharing this with me!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Wow...thank you so much for your awesome review.

[Owlgirl]

Wow, I love the way you put this "Spear Heading The Ugly" and the vocabulary adn truth and pain in this poem is amazing. Great job.

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

I read the author's note and knew I would like this. I didn't think it would be this awesome... One of these days, people are going to regret their lies and cruelty. Until then, we can only pray for mercy. ^____^

[The Winter Grey]

Go for it :)