When you Say You Love Me

...what does it mean?

When you say you love me...

I see the words floating above
surrounded by cotton-like clouds
for a moment, I believe in love

and then they fall

annihilation certain without refrain
for movements of arms and eyes and words
so full of anger that drip with disdain

they cover the air 

like an inpenetrable sheet of polluting smog
they enter my lungs and eyes as i breathe
in a state of confusion I'm left in a fog

that confines me

to the spot upon which I stand
unable to move or float or fall
just waiting for the next demand

to pierce my heart

and force me to breathe
in the toxic remains of seething rage
that paralyze me unable to leave

When you say you love me...

I shudder to think
what destruction would come
were you on the brink

of hating me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

It has become a truism to say that the line between love and hate, as the line between sanity and not, is very thin ans elastic. Yet in another sense there is a world of difference. some things are never meant to be defined and yet we strain for ever to do just that.
This is not love, this is a selfish wish to posess. This that he speaks. That is why she feels choked and constricted. When he says he loves her he is really saying he wants her.
This is a very visual poem in that I can see the words drawn out and changing colour as they are spoken. This poem should be acted as it is written. I feel this is a collage of thoughts of a poem.

[A.T.B.]

Outstanding imagery and smooth flow. You show so much about the narrator through the words you have her/him speak. When I read "and they fall" it reminded me of a poem I wrote years ago titled "sweet Words." You have written a beautiful piece.

[DeAn]

wow indeed. It is a sad world when Love has become an overrated word and instills fear in the mind of many.

Hell in true form this world.

why do we even live it?

insane ponderings of labeled mind I guess.

:)

great poem in any case and the flow of it was awesome as well as the structuring.

loved it.
l8r g8r
-Tao

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Wow, very powerful poem... made me remember back to my old relationship.... This is full of emotions that drip off the page.... Great Poem, it had such a great flow to it.... great Job... Going into my favorites!