A Question.

Control.

My need for absolute control, controls me, isn’t that ironic?

If I cannot control my surroundings I lose control of myself.

I’m still here but it’s not me,

It’s not the part of me I want anyone to see.

But you do.

You see everything.

Why do you stay?

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Control freaks drive themselves, ans everyone around them nuts. The Marine Corps officer ranks are full of them. I'm sure the rest of the armed forces are the same.

[Jon Roggie]

Sometimes, it is hard to accept, but some stay because of you. Nice write.

[Wórdsmíth]

I must say, "you write very deep writes" and, it`s been a passion of mine to read such pieces of immorality where I find the fathom of words in words.

The "heart" is variant having very cold and warmed variability to "love" and, we can`t control it because, we don`t have rein ov`r the "surroundings" and, the surroundings begets surroundings to make the heart loose its beats to others and, getting lost somewhere around the world with its own "thoughts" which work upon our "wisdom" having countless "questions" to life. Beautiful and an insightful piece of your melodic philosophy.

[The Twin Arenas]

Ya. Well, you're aware of it, I guess. Probably why whoever this is about stays.
Pretty good. S**t like this can go and on, and this doesn't, so that's good.

nice beat between the main body of the thing and the end as well.

[rach]

Thank you.

[avant security guard]

mysterious--nice--
questions of control--that's a good one---
I liked it

[rach]

Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of when i was younger...and in relationships...the other person would say "i like you" or "i love you"...and i would say "why?"

once that person really started to get to know the real me...i questioned...

didn't feel loveable...often we deal with that uncertainty of ourselves.

[rach]

I agree, I think everyone feels it to a degree, it can be crippling if you let it get the best of you!

[Cerebriation]

To be in control of anything is fruitless. Once we learn that we are not in control, then things will come more easily. Step back and find a new perspective. Gaze at the grand scheme of things. Be that which you see is essential to this scheme. Just ride the wave.

[rach]

Thats tough for a control freak!
But its something to work towards.
Thank you for your words.

[Matching Socks]

Having read your last poem, I think control comes with the territory. The need to feel everything is in check, they way YOU need it to be. Great job, thought provoking and meaningful.

[rach]

Thank you!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

It is ironic that your concern with seeing is directed at someone who cannot.
Because , as they say, love is blind.
Lovely little poem.

[rach]

Thank you!