Until The Last Flame Dies

Until The Last Flame Dies

A Poem by Abbie
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random poem I came up with. Don't know if I like it. Do you?

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Sitting in the darkened room
With many candles flickering
Mourning you

There are one thousand and thirteen flames
All flickering for every day
That I have loved you

Tomorrow there will be a new one
The day after that
And the next

I will love you forever
Even though you are gone
Living among the dead

I love you so much
I will light a new candle
Every day that I live

So I promise you
I will love you until
The last flame dies

© 2012 Abbie


Author's Note

Abbie
Please let me know what you think. It just kind of came to me, so I don't know if I like it.
rate and review please! :D

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This is utterly amazing. The subject matter, the way you handled it, word choice, the way you formatted it, priceless. My favorite part of this of course, is the title drop at the end. I am a very big fan of those and this is one of the better ones that I have seen.

The only thing I don't like is that I am so very inspired by the last stanza of the piece, that I want to write something new...and I can't use the line as the title because you've already done that. So drat on that point. Still, excellent poem. You have a gift.

-Caradoc

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's well-written, I'll give you that. It's just that it's hard for me to appreciate love poems, because it's a feeling that I'm unfamiliar with. But, good job nonetheless.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazing writing. From the first line you can tell what it's about. Keep up the good work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Aww so sweet :) I liked it all

Posted 12 Years Ago


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AK
Awesome poem! The title And the last line(though technically they are almost the same) were very nice. Keep writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very powerful. Lighting a new candle for each day of being without your love. Very inspiring.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love this, story idea?
beautiful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Loved ones never leave us and are always loved no matter what.
Nice poem :D
xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is very good. very relatable as well. nice write

Posted 12 Years Ago



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