this is a musical, and it needs a name!~~scene 1 act 1~~

okay, random Idea (creating a play) that I have had for a while....don't really know how to explain what it is yet...

[The stage is pitch black and you are unable to see anything. All of a sudden, there is a spotlight on upstage. You see a young girl who appears to be around the age of 16 sitting on a wooden chair. She has long black hair pulled into a thick braid. her emerald eyes are fiery. She is wearing quite a lot of makeup. She wears a poofy, sparkling pink dress with 3 inch high heels. Her arms are crossed over her chest and she looks quite unhappy.]

 

Woman's Voice- Andrea! Come on girl! Your sweet sixteen birthday party is about to begin!

 

[a spotlight follows an older woman with long blonde hair runs onto upstage. She to is all dressed up, but wears a plain red dress, instead of the beautiful dress that the young girl, Andrea, is wearing. She goes over to Andrea and makes her get out of her chair. She fixes and tweaks around with how Andrea looks until she is happy. They are the only two people/things that are visible on stage.]

 

Andrea- Mama! Please stop. I look horrible enough! [she looks miserable]

 

Andrea's Mama- Andrea... [Andrea's Mama looks sternly at her as she stops fidgeting with her and the dress that she is wearing] You look beautiful, not horrible. Now come on! The party awaits you!

 

[Andrea's Mama grabs Andrea's wrist and leads her downstage. The entire stage lights up. There are a ton of people and the party is all set up. Everyone is dressed formally and looks fancy. Seeing her, they clap and murmur happy birthday's, and congratulation's before going back to talking among themselves. Her mother walks over to join them in conversation, leaving Andrea alone. Andrea looks very unhappy]

 

Andrea-(sings)-

This is not how I want my life to be!

All fancy, rich, and girly. [looks disgustedly at her dress]

I always wished to be free.

I wish to be me!

 

 Free of the choices premade made for me.

 Free of all the expectations,

Free of this glamorous life! [waves hands around at everyone at the party]

 I wish to just be me!

 

I wish to show my real self!

the girl who is tough and strong! [makes fists, as if he was going to fight]

the one that doesn't mind being dirty!

The one who likes to play rough!

This is the real me!

 

 But my mother wishes to make something else of me!

to be a good young lady

proper in every way [fakes being proper, while making a disgusted face]

but, oh how I wish to be me!

 

no matter how hard I rebel

how much I fight

I always get pushed back to the ground [points angrily to the ground]

when I try to be the real me!

 

I won't back down though

I will always keep fighting

I will get back up!

I will always strive to be me!

Author's Note

hey, what do you think?????????? does my musical (I still can't believe I made one :O ) suck? it's just the first part of act 1, not the whole thing.
oh, and the pic is of her dress, but only to show you the dress. I think she looks differently. :D anywho, please comment, otherwise I will think it sucks and I will not continue it!

Reviews

[Sophie]

oooh! I like it! Great first act! waiting for the next one!

[Abbie]

glad you like it! and its ony part one of the first act, not the entire first act XD and I'm already working on the next part! :D

[Sophie]

oooh okeydokey

[Abbie]

:D

[Serenity Faith]

I love it! You should definitely continue with this. It was like a mix of Mulan and Tangled for me though ^_^ I'm a huge Disney dork >.< But hey that says something! If you've already reminded two people of something from Disney, maybe you'll spark the interest of a Disney creator too, and turn this bad boy into a movie ^_~ Keep it up!

[Abbie]

hey, disney is awesome! and with mulan, that was somewhat the idea, but slightly different. XD and I will continue it! :D and as if! this would never be good enough to be a real stage play, or a movie! I'm not THAT good XD thank you though! :D

[Serenity Faith]

Teehee ^_^ you're very welcome

[Abbie]

I've almost gotten half of act 1 part 2 done. :D I may upload it today if I get it done! :)

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This stage-play is so beautiful and so strong.
Excellent stage play!
Thanks for sharing! ^_^
100/100

[deepblue04]

I like the start! This seems like a typical teen going through a rebellion stage. Love it!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Interesting. Keep writing!

[Amanda]

The song reminded me of Mulan, which is good cuz I love that movie :P

[Abbie]

hehheh the original melody that i thought of for the song was something like 'ill make a man out of you' from mulan XD and glad you like it! XD

[The Jay]

It is decent. It has a few mistakes but nothing that cannot be corrected.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Awh sad start, but a good one. That's really all I can say seeing is how I'm not good at playes and stuff but I thought it was a good start