this is a musical, and it needs a name!~~scene 1 act 1~~

okay, random Idea (creating a play) that I have had for a while....don't really know how to explain what it is yet...

[The stage is pitch black and you are unable to see anything. All of a sudden, there is a spotlight on upstage. You see a young girl who appears to be around the age of 16 sitting on a wooden chair. She has long black hair pulled into a thick braid. her emerald eyes are fiery. She is wearing quite a lot of makeup. She wears a poofy, sparkling pink dress with 3 inch high heels. Her arms are crossed over her chest and she looks quite unhappy.]

 

Woman's Voice- Andrea! Come on girl! Your sweet sixteen birthday party is about to begin!

 

[a spotlight follows an older woman with long blonde hair runs onto upstage. She to is all dressed up, but wears a plain red dress, instead of the beautiful dress that the young girl, Andrea, is wearing. She goes over to Andrea and makes her get out of her chair. She fixes and tweaks around with how Andrea looks until she is happy. They are the only two people/things that are visible on stage.]

 

Andrea- Mama! Please stop. I look horrible enough! [she looks miserable]

 

Andrea's Mama- Andrea... [Andrea's Mama looks sternly at her as she stops fidgeting with her and the dress that she is wearing] You look beautiful, not horrible. Now come on! The party awaits you!

 

[Andrea's Mama grabs Andrea's wrist and leads her downstage. The entire stage lights up. There are a ton of people and the party is all set up. Everyone is dressed formally and looks fancy. Seeing her, they clap and murmur happy birthday's, and congratulation's before going back to talking among themselves. Her mother walks over to join them in conversation, leaving Andrea alone. Andrea looks very unhappy]

 

Andrea-(sings)-

This is not how I want my life to be!

All fancy, rich, and girly. [looks disgustedly at her dress]

I always wished to be free.

I wish to be me!

 

 Free of the choices premade made for me.

 Free of all the expectations,

Free of this glamorous life! [waves hands around at everyone at the party]

 I wish to just be me!

 

I wish to show my real self!

the girl who is tough and strong! [makes fists, as if he was going to fight]

the one that doesn't mind being dirty!

The one who likes to play rough!

This is the real me!

 

 But my mother wishes to make something else of me!

to be a good young lady

proper in every way [fakes being proper, while making a disgusted face]

but, oh how I wish to be me!

 

no matter how hard I rebel

how much I fight

I always get pushed back to the ground [points angrily to the ground]

when I try to be the real me!

 

I won't back down though

I will always keep fighting

I will get back up!

I will always strive to be me!

Author's Note

hey, what do you think?????????? does my musical (I still can't believe I made one :O ) suck? it's just the first part of act 1, not the whole thing.
oh, and the pic is of her dress, but only to show you the dress. I think she looks differently. :D anywho, please comment, otherwise I will think it sucks and I will not continue it!

Reviews

[Colleen a Bean]

I like it lot haha maybe the name should be Fighting to be just me or something along those lines :)

[Felecia]

It doesn't suck, Abbie, it's pretty good actually. For some reason it reminded me of a little kids movie that I watched when I was little. (don't worry that's a good thing) but this isn't kid-ish at all. Very nice!

[RachelReaper]

I saw every event play out easily in my head and the way you put it into full description, you could easily see what would happen on stage, and exactly what was expected from your actors. I can imagine the MC perfectly.

[Abbie]

Im glad that you could vividly see everything! :) I tried... :)

[RachelReaper]

you tried and succeeded

[Abbie]

yay. I actually kinda think that this play kinda sucks so far... but then again, I've been told that I'm quite hard on myself, so i dont know...

[Laura Maidah]

oh

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I was pleased to find a first act that could speed read so easily - this is not to say the the effort that you have evidiently put into this piece was necessarily made in speed. good work. thanks.

[Abbie]

this isn't the entire first act, this is just the first part or scene. and thank you :)

[Kerri Hart]

LOVE PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE CONTINUE

[Abbie]

I will! working on act 1 part 2! almost done! :D

[Kerri Hart]

yay its great :D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I love this and it shines a true message in it! Some parents push their children to grow up based on how they want them to be like. I personally think there are some pros and cons on them doing that to us, kids. They just want to raise us the right way, but the bad thing is we can't live how we want to! That's just the fact of life. You done an excellent job! :D

Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

[Skia1717]

I love it! It reminds me of myself. :D

[Mariah Corey]

I luv it, it allows the audience reader to see whts going on and to know how the actor feels. i luv it when it says I won't back down though

"I will always keep fighting

I will get back up!

I will always strive to be me!" I luv it, it shows that the character is strong willed and will not let someone control her destinylife. keep writing. :D

[T. Logan]

I like this! I'll wait for the next part!