Once I Met A Stranger

A sonnet that exploits the corruption of society and relates it back to the biblical cleansing. To clarify I don't want this or think this should happen. It just sounded pretty. I'm not even religious

Once I met a stranger, with no fire in his eyes,

Then I met an angel, but he was too dead inside,

The there was a leader, and his lips only spilled lies,

And a bunch of children, that had nowhere left to hide.

 

Drugs are the currency, paranoia is in bloom,

Fire scorching the skies, a disease hot from within,

We are all travesties, there will be no god left soon,

Darkness eats at our hearts; we’ll destroy him with our sin.

 

Dead ashes in the wind, I have a soul that can’t sleep,

Lost in reminiscence, plagued with guilt not only mine,

As we complete our fall, the earth will silently weep,

The catacomb of life, we destroy all we define.

 

The wanted saving waves, here will come the needed waves,

Crashing and falling in, how many lives can be saved?

 

Author's Note

Ah ignore any grammar issues I may have, it's never been my strong point trust me. I'm open to any criticism, no matter how harsh. It's of course written with the Shakespearean Sonnet format (a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g) and each line has a count of 13. The first half of the line before the comma has a count of six, and the second half a count of seven.

Reviews

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Although this is the first time I encounter a sonnet with a 13 syllables ... the highest i ever heard of is 12

[Chance Sky]

Yah I have a bad habbit of changing the rules to how I see fit. Treating them as guidelines I guess. Hehe. But thanks for reading my stuff, and I will most definitely read your poetry!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

i see! But just an advice... 13 syllables are too much... The line becomes too long and disturbs the rythem

[Chance Sky]

oh thanks! I never thought about it that way x)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

always welcome!! :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Oh How lovely! Just when I thought I am the only sonnet writer on this site
Thank you for being here lol

and if I may draw your attention to this
'The there was a leader, and his lips only spilled lies,' i think you meant "then"

Regardless, quite beautiful and expressive, my heart belongs with sonnets and metered poetry
Please do stop by, have loads of them lol