Lay It On You (Words That Is)

Ode to a beauty

This my humble duty

 

Hearts will flush when I say this

I’ll call you my love

You’ll probably blush when I say this

We’ll call it shy love

Darling you are the rhyme

Without you there’s reason

The limit’s the sky and above

So go fly on my dove

 

Let me be the words you speak

From off your tongue I’ll roll

And from your lips I’ll hang

Ruby Red Jewels

On my neck you’ve left your stain

Countess Dracula bend me to your will

Your body is a weapon

And those eyes shoot to kill

 

Your father, a maker of glass

In an hour glass frame he shaped you

I’ll give you the sands of my time

Within your curves they’ll hold true

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

Though I didn't get the rhyme of the poem, meaning was the "this" and "this" in the lines or the other repeating words on purpose or not I did enjoy this poem. It is filled with imagery. My favorite line was "Countess Dracula bend me to you will". I pictured the ultimate surrender for the speaker of this poem in the most sensual and wicked ways. I don't know if that was what you were aiming for. This was a very good piece.

[Laura Maidah]

This is genius.

[Lunny]

it's good and different a bit

[Jordan A. Wilson]

now now lol. thanks

[Mazie Tackett]

great poem that kept me reading

[Harley (arbiter)]

Awesome man! You still impress me and everybody else with your style. Keep it up

[Claire's-Girl]

Beautiful, and I adore your twist on phrases and cliches. It takes a certain kind of mind to do that so gracefully.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry. I like the flow of the story. leading the reader into thoughts and places.
"I’ll give you the sands of my time
Within your curves they’ll hold true"
Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Cole Hayley]

I love love loveeeeeee the last stanza, that is incredible. Very well done, impressive

[Beck Louise]

So sweet, really well written, just great :)

[kayla]

This is a good poem. I like the theme and tone of it. I think that you should't use "love" twice though, but that's just my opinion. Everything else is great. I love the imagery throughout.(: