Will You Be Mine?

This one is actually a song that I wrote

You are my oasis in a concrete desert.

You are the clear sky shining through the trees.

I don’t think it could get any better.

Cuz I have you right here sticking it out with me.

 

What I really want to say is…

What you mean to me.

I really want to show you…

What we could be.

I’d climb the highest peak.

Ain’t no mountain that’s too high.

What I really want to know is…

Will you be mine?

 

When the trail ends and the bitter

cold takes over.

And the darkness makes it hard to see.

Just the thought of you, girl, keeps me from slowing.

You fill my head with soothing melodies.

 

What I really want to say is…

What you mean to me.

I really want to show you…

What we could be.

I’d climb the highest peak.

Ain’t no mountain that’s too high.

What I really want to know is…

Will you be mine?

Author's Note

Feel free to review. I both respect and appreciate criticism, positive or negative.

Reviews

[henrie s]

i really liked this because you weren't afraid to be sweet. sometimes i think these days that so many people are focusing more on the harder, harsher aspects of love. not to say there isn't truth in that as well, however i do think that it's so easy to forget the sweet and exciting nature with which love begins. i think this is commendable and lovely.

[Lindsay T]

This is beautiful and really sweet. I love your romantic voice and how you made the reader understand everything you were expressing. I usually include a suggestion in my reviews, but this is so perfect I don't think there's anything to improve on :)

[just is]

Very nicely written, I enjoyed this

[Maan]

I really like the simplicity and humbleness of the poem. Its wonderful but you can do a lot more good to it like addition of more feelings and imaginations to it. Else good job. :)

[Laura S.]

This is BEAUTIFUL. One of the sweetest poems I've come across to! If you recited this poem to a girl, I don't think she would hesitate to say "Yes". Really really nice job :)