Asleep

Asleep
Why do they wake
the princess sleeping beauty
while she's sleeping
what a cruel thing to do
she could be dreaming something
something beautiful
Sometimes i wish i could stay sleeping
that way i wouldn't have to wake up to the hole in my life
So why
Try to wake someone when there sleeping
Such a cruel thing to do
but even worse is
not to wake when your depended on
like those who sleep in padded boxes
underneath us
such a cruel thing to do
when your depended on
to stay forever more
asleep

Reviews

[Alm]

At first I thought that "what a cruel thing to do" was a reference to one of the versions of sleeping beauty (I forgot what it was called, but sleeping beauty was raped in that version).

But nevermind that, I like how this shows two sides to the story. The first, is hoping to stay asleep--to dream of better and beautiful things.

And the second part, is how it is crueler to stay asleep or, (as I see it) die when you are still needed. The part, "like those who sleep in padded boxes underneath us" I see as poor parents who have only love to give to children, and are needed by them. But die and give up, leaving their children--who need them--behind. I guess that's how I see it, because of where I'm from.

It's beautiful, in all its entirety.

p.s. "There" on line 11 should be changed to they're, and "your" on line 14 and 18 should be changed to you're. I mean no offense, just grammar checking.

-Alm :)

[Shy Girl]

Sleeping in the literal sense is a fact of living...we need to sleep to heal or grow and even to take a step back to regroup. But sleeping as we sometimes do while awake is so hard to shake out of the habit. Like when one fogs out while something important is taking place. When the one you depend upon is forever gone that is the hardest one of all. Cruel even as you said...but once again fact of fate. This poem was a very read and I liked the way you were really (it felt) as though you were just having a conversation with the reader. I like the fresh change :)

[MOON]

Awake to life , sometimes the dream is better easier.

[The Animal Guy]

You get woken up in the middle of dreams too? So, do I. I usually get woken up from a nice dream mainly from family. I try to go back to that very dream, but it keeps drifting off into the distance.

Great poem, keep it up

[kelly24]

wasn't expecting the ending of this. It started out playful and ended really serious, nice job

[luna11]

It's cruel to wake someone up in the middle of a lovely dream.
My mum does it to me every morning :D
Sometimes it feels terrible to go back to your life after a dream where everything was going perfectly.
But in the real world, people depend on you, and it's hard to depend on someone who's in dreamworld all the time.
Great poem! :)