Floating Thoughts

I was laying in the pool a couple of years ago and I like to 'float' on my back to where my ears are just barely under the water to which these 'thoughts' came to my mind

(Part 1)

As I lay floating

on my back in the water

I slowly drain out all of the noise

By having my ears slightly underwater

No wind. No birds chirping. No traffic noise.

SILENCE. Only the sound of my heartbeat

you can hear through the water.

Fast at first, then slower as I take deep breaths.

But wait. What's that? A bird chirping

louder than the rest?

It's barely the faintest of noise but I 

still hear it. 

It's almost like it's screaming it's 

feelings like I'm screaming on the

inside. In my soul. 

More deep breaths to clear my mind. 

Slow down the heartbeat.

(Part 2)

As I lay floating

just listening to my heartbeat. Looking

at the trees and the sky.

I wonder if astronauts feel like this when 

they are in space.

They could be floating in space right 

now looking down on Earth.

The difference though

I can still breathe air and come back 

instantly to all of the noise of reality

But do I want this reality? Does 

anybody want this reality?

Author's Note

This is how I had written it down 2 years ago and I put it together kind of quick so it's not actually 100% formal so you don't have to comment about the setup unless you feeling like giving nice advice. I'm not a professional.

Reviews

[Martiya Daman]

This poem made me feel peaceful at first, like floating in water and listening to your heartbeat. But then, it made me think about how we all have deep feelings, like the bird and the person inside the poem. It also made me wonder about space and reality, and if anyone really wants to face all the noise of the world. Lovely work, Eva.

Martiya

[willweb]

I as well could feel this and have done this in a pool. All noise ceases and the rhythm of your heartbeat is all you can hear. Really nicely done.

[Serendipity Planet]

I could actually feel this , you described your feelings well

[James Mckay]

I think it's written very beautifully and it surely grabs your imagination. I honestly feel you don't have to be a professional to write poetry as long as you speak directly from your heart. Nicely done.

[Eva Andrae]

Thank you so much!