Daydreaming

Attempt at a katauta poem

Twirling, twisting skin
Pulsating, vibrating thought
Of you, mon coeur

Reviews

[Kianzeht]

Awesome.so short but still it's awesome.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting form. Those Japanese really know how to create many different short form poetry styles. I am guessing you will write part two?

PS {5-7-5 or 5-7-7 are the usual syllable counts- I can only count 4 beats/on in the final line?