Widow's Walk

I open my eyes

Hear the clock ticking

Thoughts trickle into my mind

like light rain drops.

Could it had been your presence soothe mine, 

only days ago?

No, that can not be

It must have been months or years.

The universe has called you away

You have promise to return

I pray you will, mon coeur.

I will cultivate a garden;

thick and lush shielding my soul against all-consuming fear and worry.

If the universe grants you salvation;

Your bride will be waiting.

I pledge my life to you.

For now I will take my place on the widow’s walk;

I will wait, wonder, and pray.

For the winds to bring your ship in;

The rain stops.

I close my eyes and say a silent prayer

“Grant him mercy and return my sweet prince back to me.”

Reviews

[Bacchus]

the wait
but why
patient and encouraging
write

[Chris]

Faith - is all you have at times to give you the strength to continue.

[Ookpik]

hauntingly beautiful glimpse into the love kept by a widow. This one really got me despite having so little life experience to relate it to. The stamp of good work!

[Ted Kniffen]

This is a good poem, but there are a few minor issues.
Could it had been you presence soothe mine only days ago? (should this be 'Could it have been your presence soothing mine?')

I will cultivate a garden;

that is thick and lush to protect my soul against all-consuming fear and worry.

(I will cultivate a lush garden
to protect my soul against all-consuming fear and worry.)

I think this will improve the flow a bit.

This is a good poem. Well thought out and written with feeling. Keep writing.

[Ookpik]

I think english is her second language

[Ted Kniffen]

So did I. A good piece and I'm sure her English will improve.

[Ookpik]

I agree : ) good advice too