This One, This Time

This One, This Time

A Poem by Jen Walters

This one, this time,
I will get it right.
This one, this time,
I will not fight.

This one, this time,
I need you in my sight.
This one, this time,
I love you with all my might.
This one, this time,
I am guided by your light.
This one, this time,
I am no longer in flight.
This one, this time,
I will hold you oh so tight.

This one, this time,
I am the light.
This one, this time,
I am gifted with sight.

© 2015 Jen Walters


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In all honesty this one has too much form for me. I think you built it around the rhyme scheme and lost the power of your meaning in the limitations of the rhymes. If you were to write this one out in free flow I wonder what wonderful words would replace the -ights....Just my thought and personal taste....sorry and I hope the honesty has helped. Keep at it dear poet and never surrender..there is a talent here and a higher source in the sleeves.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jen Walters

9 Years Ago

It was just an experiment really, something different for me to write. I am trying to branch out fr.. read more
Perdition

9 Years Ago

I have a friend that went mad with triolets and her rare talent lies truly in free form, she stuck w.. read more
Jen Walters

9 Years Ago

lol that's what makes it so confusing sometimes, especially free form, I love free form and blank ve.. read more



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this is sooooooooooooooo good! omg, i love the repetition!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jen Walters

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much, I deeply appreciate your comments. I will check out your poetry I promise I just ha.. read more
In all honesty this one has too much form for me. I think you built it around the rhyme scheme and lost the power of your meaning in the limitations of the rhymes. If you were to write this one out in free flow I wonder what wonderful words would replace the -ights....Just my thought and personal taste....sorry and I hope the honesty has helped. Keep at it dear poet and never surrender..there is a talent here and a higher source in the sleeves.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jen Walters

9 Years Ago

It was just an experiment really, something different for me to write. I am trying to branch out fr.. read more
Perdition

9 Years Ago

I have a friend that went mad with triolets and her rare talent lies truly in free form, she stuck w.. read more
Jen Walters

9 Years Ago

lol that's what makes it so confusing sometimes, especially free form, I love free form and blank ve.. read more

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Jen Walters
Jen Walters

Huntingdon, PA



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