The change of Time

You were feeling uncomfortable when I was just touching ur fingers. You didn't even see me with ur good eyes.I am sure u must be judging me all the time that day when we were together there. The same place,which had witnessed all the ups and downs of our long relationship. Ours so called best place for meeting.
I was in the miserable condition.I was just there after a long bus travel .Ugly,skinny,thristy and tired .
U were feeling good cause u realized u made the right decision.U rememberd your charming and handsome new boyfriend and there I was the most miserable and pathetic guy on the planet. U felt extremy good about yourself. I didn't find any sign of love for me in your eyes. You just wanted to show me how beautiful u had become right these days since we broke. U wanted me to feel "look how beautiful ur ex is and how happy is me without u and with my new bf".I smoked two cigrattes, u didnt care. I was expecting some sorts  of "pls quit smoking" kinda things from u(even though i didnt even try to quit even after ur long try for past 3 years.)U kept saying this is the last time that u were seeing me. I kept listening with heavy heart and the tears were just  about to roll down from my eyes, i controlled myshelf facing opposite to ur face. I wasnt able to see in your eyes. U kept saying u were extremly happy without me.U tried to console me saying everything's gonna be alright kinda things but i could smell all the make up talk on them. They were not real. It was getting darker slowly, u were afraid of me, scared of me. U wanted to return home as soon as possible. I was begging u to stay for little more time.I finally got to analyse your face,ur eyes your body. They looked even more beautiful. But they belonged to someone else soon i realised.
Then your phone vibed. It was ur new bf. The contact name was your loving nickname for him. U started talking to him.I was right beside u. How can u talk to him while seeing me? No any exs does such  a mean thing. I stood up and let u  privacy. I felt damn insaulted. U didnt even realised how bad i was feeling at that moment. Why would u care? Why would u care about the feeling of that b*****d ex,who just hurted u and made u cry for straight 3 yrs of relationship? #joshi_writes

Reviews

[Elizabeth Mars]

Wow this is such a roller coaster of emotions, very raw and heartfelt piece! It is really a wonderful piece, but I would recommenced reading the piece over to fix the small things like spelling, instead of 'u' put 'you', and try reading over the piece again to check for sentences that have extra words or need words, for example: "I was in the miserable condition" could be changed to "I was in miserable condition" so the thought is more concise and clear to the reader. But besides the spelling and sentence structure the piece was quite intriguing! I especially love how you wrote in first person! It gave the heartbreak tall a very fresh and interesting perspective! I can't wait to see more work in the future!