well, hello there

i've spent more of my time 

looking for nature's beauty 

than reading 

and i've read a lot. 

i've captured sundogs on the horizon 

i've trapped crepuscular rays 

i've even shadowed an eclipse 

and been bathed in meteor showers. 

how is it 

this is the first i've truly seen you? 

you should have appeared 

long, long ago.

Reviews

[gingergee]

I had to read this a few times to understand but finally did and liked what you had to say. I understood it to mean that you have seen a lot but only just noticed someone or something new. How true this is for all of us.

Because the punctuation is all lower case (and the word nature is spelled wrong), I thought this was written through the eyes of a very young person and was surprised by the word crepuscular which would probably not be used by someone young. Not to step on your toes, or demean what you have written, but to me, the word twilight seems to be more fitting. I also looked up the meaning of sundogs and was happy to learn what they are. Good writing makes us have to think and your writing did that for me. Great job!

[Kitty Cat]

Ah! Thanks for reading, and pointing out that I'd spelled nature wrong. (Amateur hour!) I should've proofread more carefully; I was a bit nervous about putting it up.

Out of curiosity, where did you think twilight would have been more fitting? I'm always interested in seeing how different words can change poems.

[gingergee]

You definitely should have posted your poem. It's really good!

I looked up the word crepuscular and the basic meaning was twilight. To me, twilight just seems to flow better. The other word made me stop and try to sound it out before moving on. Either word you choose will be good, because it's your poem and you need to be happy with it.

[Kitty Cat]

Oh, ah! I see. I understand. I think if you look up "crepuscular rays", I think you'll get a clearer image of what I wanted to convey.