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"The Headache, Oh The Headache"

Tired of living 

and death be a chore

fatigued by forgiving 

once then and once more

Bored of the moaning 

from them and by me 

I'm sick of postponing 

things I want to see

Draw back the curtain 

and bring forth the being

I may be uncertain 

but life is for seeing

One day I'll believe that

Though today is not that day  

today the world has squashed me flat

unrelenting in making me pay.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

So I beleive that this poem is somewhere along the lines of feeling tired. And how the world sometimes is against you and how it weighs you down. But I guess for some, it brings out the fighter in us and sometimes its gets us what we want.

Guess you could say - dont give up.

Short read...yes.
But at the same time, a lot to read between the lines.

Mark.

[Skib]

The beauty of poetry is the interpretation because it will always differ according to the reader. Thank you for the review Mark, it is highly appreciated :)

[Relic]

Life will weigh down those caught in gloom, and gloom is so common these days for a lot of people.

The last stanza could use a bit of revision.

Good writing.

[Skib]

Hi Mr Relic
Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my poem.
Perhaps the world is gloom because it is inhabited by gloom people? We are a product of our environment so why can't it be the same for planets? :p Thanks again for stopping by it is appreciated.

[Zoya]

I guess the last stanza describes it all. I liked the poem. The rhyming is good as well. Keep writing!

[Skib]

Thank you Zoe :) .

[Alice Maria]

Good poem. I enjoyed reading it

[Skib]

Thank you Ms Maria :)

[Alice Maria]

You're welcome.

[ruth]

Good poem. One thing I would maybe change is the second line in the first stanza. I didn't think it fit well. That's the one thing that made me stop and wonder its meaning.

[Skib]

Hey Ruth, Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my poem. I was trying to make this piece sound exhausting.

"Tired of living
and death be a chore
Fatigued with forgiving
once then and once more"

I wanted the reader to feel bored yet intrigued and drawn in at the same time. I try to vary in style... alas poor quality slips through :p.

Thanks Again. :))

Kindest Wishes - Skib

[ruth]

Ah. It makes sense now that you've explained it. Well, it was a good try.

[Skib]

Thank you my friend :)