A momento of a moment

A momento of a moment

A Poem by Skib
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A bit of Fun :) All of those with fair skin will understand :p

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The sun shone today
like no other 
of which I can remember at least
the touch of warmth embraced me
however I recoiled
in unfamiliarity 
for such skin like mine
has not seen the light of day
in quite some time
Like I said 
It was blazing this morning 
and everything was sharp 
as if My eyes were a camera lens 
such detail in itself 
a different kind of beauty
and as every sight had a smell
foliage of different varieties 
the heat augmenting their fragrance 
My bones are warmed up now 
regaining their strength
soaking in life to the very marrow 
but not to the skin
oh no, that is paler than 
the moon 
after all "Rome was not built in a day" 
:p

© 2017 Skib


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Love it! Great last line. Totally relatable. I just become a freckle face.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Skib

7 Years Ago

:P Thank you Morgan, you share my sensitivity to the sun. It is a curse however there are those who.. read more
Nothing like some Vit D and getting a little brown in the process. A most enjoyable write, the last line was fun, tongue in cheek humour, finished the poem on a high!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Skib

7 Years Ago

too true however there is nothing like sunburn either lol and some of us are prone to it lol well us.. read more
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This makes me long for summer!
I cannot relate exactly. I tan nicely.
I liked the ending. Cute.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Skib

7 Years Ago

:P Lucky for some hahaha im glad you liked it. thank you for your kindness :)
Even colloquially, I'd like you to begin stanza 2 with "As" rather than "Like"
The poor adverb gets no respect. :-) And you might find a bit better alternative
than the cliché at the close.


Posted 8 Years Ago



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