Killed

You killed all the good in me 
I let you in 
I told you all my deepest darkest secrets 
But somehow you still left 

So I sit here wondering what I did wrong 
Not worrying about how I’m destroying myself 
I’m falling into pieces 
Too broken to put the pieces back together 

Tearing down those walls was a mistake 
Believing your lies 
Letting you hold me 
Made me weak 

Now I am unarmed 
While you have all the weapons 
That can be used to break me 
Instead you use them to kill me 

You killed all the hope I had 
I believed love was pure like a dove 
I was so high that I was flying 
But now my wings are clipped 

No words can fix this 
No medication can make me feel better 
No wounds can be heal 

You killed 
My heart 
My soul 
And most of all me 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think

Reviews

[KillerWithWords]

Wow. Great job. This is deep. I like how you compare hope to a bird's flight. Just a s a bird can fly it's way out of any situation, hope can do the same. Once hope is clipped, a person can become very vulnerable to any attacks. Just like a bird cannot fly away from predators.
Deep stuff you got going on here...

[skiayly]

Thank You !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and if someone else has already killed our heart, how many times can we resurrect it?

it dies harder each time...or maybe easier, come to think of it.

[skiayly]

That's a good thing to think about. Personally, I believe it does harder each time being that we are supposed to learn from our mistakes. Thanks for commenting :)

[efflorescere]

I really like this!
"So I sit here wondering what I did wrong
Not worrying about how I’m destroying myself
I’m falling into pieces
Too broken to put the pieces back together"
That stanza is just amazing, I can relate. Great job!

[skiayly]

Thank You! I'm glad that you can relate

[Nikki Hughes]

Beautiful and deep. It describes what I felt when my girlfriend dumped me.

[skiayly]

Thank you! Sorry about your break up

[Max Teal]

Your about me said if I need anything just ask you. I need a chicken fajita.

[skiayly]

lol where do you want me to ship it to? lol

[Max Teal]

Belgium. Have them put it on ice. I'll come eat it in 5 years.

[skiayly]

alright!

[Salar Majak]

(I believed love was pure like a dove
I was so high that I was flying
But now my wings are clipped )

i loved this part it is so deep, you captured the emotion greatly! nice job, i can feel what you wrote.

[skiayly]

Thank You!

[CureThePoison]

-le hugs- I probably know this feeling best.
(going back to the poem itself) I think that it's really good. I enjoyed reading it and I love the fact that it's something that many people could relate to. However, I feel like there's something missing in this poem and I think its the flow. Some lines flow perfectly, but others seem a little choppy to me making the poem slightly uneven. Other than that its well done and I enjoyed reading it :3

[skiayly]

Thank YOu!

[CureThePoison]

You're very welcome ^^