Anonymous - One

You believe that you are strong, because for a long while you can withhold an anchor
But eventually, it drags you down into the vast emptiness you feel
The chain wrapped around your arms leaves a trail of red, crimson lines
And soon the trail extends up, down and around to your stomach, thighs and ankles
You constantly hear lies and like blades they reopen the cuts until eventually
You bleed out
And there you are
Alone
A lifeless shell with no mass being dragged down into the hole that fades from white to gray to black
And everyone believes that you will just climb or rewind
But you can't
And when you hit the bottom
There's no turning back
By that time your skin is raw and your bones are shattered
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And that's how it ends
And as the days dragged on and felt like centuries
No one realized how rapidly you deteriorated
Or maybe
They did
And you didn't want their help
Or you were sick of smiling to appease everyone
When you had more important subjects to ponder
Such as when and how and whom would attack next
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And the saddest fact of all
Is that maybe
Just maybe
You hurt yourself much more than anyone else

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

These lines stuck out for me:

The chain wrapped around your arms leaves a trail of red, crimson lines
And soon the trail extends up, down and around to your stomach, thighs and ankles
You constantly hear lies and like blades they reopen the cuts until eventually
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or may be this:

Chain wrapped around your arms leaves a trail of red, crimson lines
And soon the trail extends up, down and around your stomach, thighs and ankles
You constantly hear lies and blades they reopen the cuts until eventually

and this one:

A lifeless shell with no mass being dragged down into the hole that fades from white to gray to black
And everyone believes that you will just climb or rewind
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A lifeless shell with no mass being dragged down into the hole that fades from white, gray and black
Everyone believes that you will just climb or rewind
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as for the verse itself...speaks much volume --- never loses pace with what you want to convey to the reader... as you close with the lines:

And the saddest fact of all
Is that maybe
Just maybe
You hurt yourself much more than anyone else
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Of course, the constructive criticism is just IMPO --- just notice those lines more than the others...like the over-all concept you put forth here in the write...

[Roger Turgeon]

Clearly a paranoid pessimist wrote this....but then again that's how you see yourself based upon your bio. I do love the dark side....and many of your favorite things as well .... wink lol ( : O )