Just you

for those who finally show what they can't hide anymore

i see you. 

just you. 

no lights. 

no camera. 

no action. 

just you. 

and you're beautiful

but somehow broken. 

your eyes, so open

nothing hidden inside. 

conveying every truth you've hidden before. 

i now see

the pain you've been holding. 

not the gentle little girl anymore. 

the cracks are there. 

in your gaze

on your heart

some even on your skin. 

showing how hard the world has touched you. 

just you. 

Reviews

[Nature]

Worth reading. No fancy work. You wrote it by heart, i guess.
Best lines were 'some even on your skin.
showing how hard the world has touched you.' Scarcasm. Right?

[Nicole Schuster]

Exactly by heart. No, it wasn't sarcasm, but thanks for the review and the read!

[SuMM3rGiRl777]

Nice! I like this. ^_^ Its good.

[Nicole Schuster]

Thank you!!

[Hailey Juliet]

I love this poem! Seeing somebody exactly as they are; all their flaws, imperfections, mortality, and character faults. We can't know somebody until we accept every part of them, all their good and bad characteristics.
Very nice poem!

[Nicole Schuster]

Thank you!

[MAC]

simply beautiful........written to perfection

[Nicole Schuster]

Aw thank you!!

[Joe W]

I like the simplicity of the poem. I admire people who can write things like this that are short but pack a powerful message.

[Nicole Schuster]

Thanks for the review! :)

[Joe W]

No problem. I love reviewing other peoples work. :)

[freaksheet]

Powerful, and accurate! This is a great poem!

[Érenn]

There are two things which I really love about this poem - one is its simplicity and the other is the choice of words . Nothing unnecessary, just the words needed to create the imagery, generate the emotions and in the end give the punch that leaves an impression in a reader's heart. I like the way the poem starts the most though.The metaphor used is excellent. Thank you for sharing ^^

[Nicole Schuster]

thanks! i tried to go for something powerful, yet simple so that the truth (hence the title) wouldn't be crowded or forgotten. thanks for the review!

[A. Amos]

I love the simplicity yet powerful expressions you shared in this wonderful poem.

[Nicole Schuster]

simplicity was kind of my goal here - thanks!!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome!

[John Ivy]

A very beautiful poem! An outstanding perspective on a very serious topic. Very well done!

[Nicole Schuster]

Thank you!!