HER?!

 

Oh I can tell,

she’s still on your mind

Showing up 

from time to time...

Her sweet memory

 still not dead...

as she continues

to  haunt 

most 

your thoughts

that run mad 

inside your head,

And so 

tell me please this,

does she join us tonight

while we 

lie together

inside this  bed?

 

 

And

In me,

is it her you see?

Sometimes wishing

I just might be?

Do you see her

when you look at my face?

And when you kiss me

is it her

that you taste?

And can you hear her voice

when I speak your name?

And when I touch you

 does it feel the same?

And are you yearning for her

As I wet my lips,

Desiring her

When you caress my hips? 

And do you still dream of her

In the dark silent  night

and still

 grieving for her,

 when you hold me tight?

 

Do I take you back to her

with the things

that I say and I do?

And are you secretly hoping

she might

still

  somehow

find her way 

back to you?  

 

 -  And Am I here now 

 to help you

  re-live your past?

Give you a second chance

at a love that couldnt last?

Am I here now,  

to help you right all your wrongs

Suppress the memories

to which you still belong.

Am I here

 to help you lessen the  pain

Although devoted to her

You shall forever remain.

And do you think I can’t tell

when I look into your eyes

That when she left you

your heart had met its demise

and so now

 you are convinced 

   that

love and devotion

 are

nothing but lies.... 

 

Well however

 I hope

I can  

 help

to make you see

That I’m NOT HER

And I WILL NEVER BE!

And I will no longer

go on

competing 

With her memory!….

Reviews

[Jon]

Really liked this - flowed really well and expressed the weight of the subject matter to great effect. For someone to try to re-live an old relationship through another person rather than to find the strength they need to move on first is hard to forgive - and I think this piece gives that notion real gravitas.

"Am I here now,
to help you right all your wrongs
Suppress the memories
to which you still belong.
Am I here
to help you lessen the pain
Although devoted to her
You shall forever remain."

Top writing!

[Shellie]

Flow was superb. The feelings are intense but you know...very real. I hope you get an answer for your own peace of mind but i hope its the right one. The poem though.... its excellent!!

[Wondering Mind]

This paints anguish brilliantly in wonderful flow...Your use of breaks in the free verse is to great effect. Something to learn from.

[Steve]

Wow...this is very well done! Nice job of being a good poet.

[Greg Skura]

Wow this is really good! I see through the poem you have worn the shoes of which you describe. Brilliant!