Stark Reality

This speaks for itself...

Happiness is but a teasing illusion...
A phantasm whispered in my disillusioned ear...
My meager lifeline is a caricature of a smiling drone...
Doomed to roam the cosmos...
Silently weeping at the serrated realization...
My emotional well runs through eternity...agonizing...
Potential extinguished by a mischevous entity..
Slapped in the face with a stark reality.

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

My emotional well runs through eternity...agonizing...wonderful line. This was a great reality piece and how stark reality is when we are literally slapped with it! Great job!

[Steve L.]

Thank you! Much appreciated

[MsJewel]

oh yes...that cold slap of reality...
it's much nicer (and warmer) to keep dreaming...in that "teasing illusion" you speak of.

A great poem. Well written and a delight to read.

:) Julie

[Steve L.]

Thank you Julie!!! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Such big words haha.
Smart, but I would prefer it simpler, to understand.
Although for a small piece it had tons of emotion, and depth, and so much meaning.
It was honest and REAL!
I like that about this piece.
I could relate to the first line, its how im feeling, the last few months.
Great write :)

[Steve L.]

I really appreciate your review. I was in a dark place when I wrote this.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad you are out of it now.
how did you get out of it?
your welcome :)

[Steve L.]

Good question...Deep breathing and mindfulness really helped...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I doubt tat would work for me but thanks lol

[AprilRN1210]

that slap stings doesn't it?... "they" say "the truth hurts".. I agree that sometimes it does.. I love every line of this powerfully condensed piece Steve.. wow.. one of your best.. the emotion strong and packs a punch.. favorite line would have to be "silently weeping at the serrated realization"... stunning phrasing throughout.. saving this one.. awesome writing my friend.. ((hugs)) to you...

[Steve L.]

Thank you April, I always appreciate your reviews.

[Matching Socks]

I really can't disagree but I still have hope...
Good poem, very moving.

[Steve L.]

Thank you, Ana.

[Lyn Anderson]

When we feel empty, lost, and without, it is easy to believe that happiness is just a fairytale.

[Steve L.]

Thank you for the review