Prisoner in Blackened Quicksand

A poem filled with unicorns, rainbows, and monumental happiness...

A macabre story unfolds sight unseen…

Violent thunderstorms erupt in the murky subterranean…

Negativity becomes your murky, sadistic life force…

A dark, ghoulish entity usurps control of your neural firings…

Uncontrollable your abject misery becomes…

Permeating, leaving scorched earth for your closest loved ones…

Forever scarred they will be left…

Eternal guilt will consume you until the end of days.

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Guilt can be a prison....and can consume the guilty party. Hmmm....lots to think about in this one. Dark and haunting. Very apropos for the end of this month and Halloween! Lydi**

[Steve L.]

Ha!! A little Halloween lullaby!!!

[AprilRN1210]

cute description smarty pants.. love the sarcasm.. I know the place from which this comes and it only deepens the effect.. my heart goes out to you with this piece and know I am here, if ever need a friend sir.. as far as the writing goes, it is powerful, dark, and true to this affliction.. it is consuming, violent, and negative.. and contrary to popular belief, isn't something that is easily "controllable"... nice job, Steve..

[Steve L.]

Ha!!! I am happy that you enjoyed the "sunny" teaser that I gave!!! Thank you!!

[AprilRN1210]

yea yea.. :P
you're welcome...

[Steve L.]

Always a pleasure to make you smile!! ;)

[AprilRN1210]

win-win, cause I like smilin :)

[Matching Socks]

What?! Total misrep!! :)

[Steve L.]

Ha!! Sorry!! Couldn't help it :)

[katijori]

My mood exactly. I'm glad I hopped on here today

[Steve L.]

Yay team!!!

[katijori]

Yeah, going down the rabbit hole. Too bad I can't write like you ...

[Steve L.]

You should try :)

[katijori]

Too embarrassed. I suck I'm sure. I don't even know where to start.

[Steve L.]

This is a place to do it....no judgement. This is a community. And you are uber intelligent!!!!

[katijori]

Maybe. We will see

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for the vision of unicorns and cotton candy and all things blissful and magical :) I love your sense of (humour? irony?)

[Steve L.]

Ha!! Probably a little of both!! Thank you.

[Briana O'Connor]

Love the sickening darkness about this piece. You words leave much to envision. Very well expressed. Thank you for sharing.

[Steve L.]

You are very welcome.