The opaque darkness is nothing but void

English Sonnet

The opaque darkness is nothing but void.

This space in my heart is where you belong.

I used ev’ry weapon; I lay destroyed,

Distraught, in this nothingness—I was wrong.

 

I’ve evaded saying this directly

I know it is one way to convince you.

I’ve evaded hearing that you agree

That we’re so over, so completely through.

 

The single rose has been hacked, torn to shred,

A tragedy—travesty, trashed and gone.

How could one dispose of true love, what dread

Awaits she who dismissed twilight for dawn?

 

What hell awaits she, so unsatisfied,

But that of lonely punishment for pride?

Author's Note

It's not meant to be in iambic pentameter. It's a sonnet for its rhyme scheme and format/syllables.

Reviews

[A. Amos]

This is one of most daring & stylish piece of writing, i have to come back to read more of your work...thank you for sharing

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[J Carly]

Girl, if I didn't already know we were related, this would convince me that we have twin souls. Not identical, but fraternal. Sometimes I wish I had this ability of yours to stick to a format or rhyming scheme. In any case, this is a powerful write you've got here. The sentiments expressed in this piece I think are something many of us can relate to. Well done.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Beautiful, the rhymes, the scheme, everything. I found in particular the ending as the best part of this poem. Great writing.