"White Butterfly"

seeking heaven

White Butterfly

can you tell me why

why your wings so wide

how you soar so high

high up to the sky

you must be glory hallelujah!

you must be praising God!

gurl you must be praisng God!.

Reviews

[N3v3r_2_L@t3]

I agree with William. You could have added more to it. It seems sort of bland. I do, however, like the thought that goes into it. The fact that the butterfly is 'white' and you are talking about it glorifying god, as if it were an angel, I like that. And you may have done it on purpose, because some people spell it like that, but you spelt girl wrong on the last line. Overally, though it may be short, you did a good job. Welcome to writer's cafe, I hope to see longer, more descriptive peices from you=]

[None]

This is perfect! An adorable poem and then a surprise praise to God--and He is well deserving I must say!! I have tons of butterflies in my back yard and now I will know their purpose and pleasure. Thank you so much for the insight. I can see the momentum pick up in your poem as the butterfly goes higher and higher--now we know what's going on up there!! Your writing is a treasure and I'm saving it to my favorites!

[gaurishankar]

Oh! sweet. The thoughts are competing with the butterfly and fly in the air ,restless with happiness in adoring nature! The thoughts are simple and your curiosity is marvellous. Your poetry is from your heart dear .

I cant say that I didnt enjoy reading it,but it seems unstructured.