hopeful

i really don't know what this is. its a mixture of the past and what i want for the future i guess.

Twilight drifts into speckled stars that greet us with open arms.

We sing softly: nonsensical static playing with our lips and ears.

All I see is comfort, comfort, comfort and the loss

of the memories of the lost that have done more bad than good.

The grass under our feet is wet and cool against the warm air

and our warmer bodies and everything falls out of place,

falls out of the place where it has been for so long

to land somewhere new and adventurous and

 

C O M F O R T I N G

 

Just stay and stay and stay so we won't have to worry.

 

Author's Note

please review. i actually really like this one and i want to know what you think.

Reviews

[Wildecat]

This is a wonderful poem, thanks so much for sharing.

[Kerri[pollutes]]

oh, i love this
"Just stay and stay and stay so we won't have to worry"
i feel this much of the time

I think this is good. The way you expressed yourself is wonderful! The repetition adds to the poem. Great work!

[fgsgdsf]

Wow, Oh wow Cortney! Did I ever tell you how much I love you? Haha, this makes me crazy for the summer coming up! This was great hun!

[Alex]

Its got a really happy mood to it, makes me wish it was summer again :) i love this poem

[Gabrielle]

i really like this one,
"Just stay and stay and stay so we won't have to worry."

that gave me chills.

[Ben Walton]

And isn't it intresting that how when you repeat something, you repeat it three times? it's very natural, like, you would never think to do it another way. It's like, a rule in classical music, for the coda to repeat the last phrase three times as you end.

[Ben Walton]

It's weird, this reminds me of something i would write.

[Nessa]

I loved the rhythm and the words.
I love your writing