oasis:utopia
A Poem by Namrata
 I don't regret this regret. 
It is a vast stretch of sand, my heart. Miles to explore in the dark. Once it dared to blossom, They say it's utopia. Ask me how. Your love came by. That is how. A single drop it was. So powerful, it didn't evaporate. The heat of my wrath failed. And although I never saw you again You carved in my heart an oasis. My heart now can live and blossom.
© 2014 Namrata
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Brilliant! Explores the precincts of infatuation and carves upon the frontiers of romance and passion. So fundamental, not unlike the sunrise and sunset with no words wasted on sunshine.. You have executed your thoughts with such ease.. Admirable :) Thanks for sharing
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
I am happy you liked this. Going through this was not easy , anyways.
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10 Years Ago
yeah lol bottom line: I liked it :D
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10 Years Ago
It couldn't have been (easy).. The poem fairly elucidated your intent to highlight only what was rat.. read moreIt couldn't have been (easy).. The poem fairly elucidated your intent to highlight only what was rationally livening.. an escape from reality? Human intelligence is such a relief ey :)
Love is never easy for those who live by it.. that's because love is a myth, a fairy tale.. it does not exist.. it is the superficial bond that houses and nurtures procreation that's all.. a devious measure by the designers
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10 Years Ago
love can't be superficial, it must be real, I have felt the real pain and where pain was, in guise o.. read morelove can't be superficial, it must be real, I have felt the real pain and where pain was, in guise of pleasure or naked, but it was there.
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10 Years Ago
that's the ugly-beauty of love. It shines light on the positives and hides all the negatives.. I don.. read morethat's the ugly-beauty of love. It shines light on the positives and hides all the negatives.. I don't deny that love can lead to happiness but such an ending (or new beginning?) could only be possible after you have experienced "the lost 'oasis'(-in your words)". To gain, you have to lose. However, if you effect loss and then/consequently gain, the pain will be greatest. So much that you will wish you were never alive to experience such disdain. Your poem has more meaning than you believe. It opens me a new book every time I read it (well, at least in 24 hour gaps) :D cheers!
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10 Years Ago
so do you say my writing has "not hypothetical" effect on you ? And as for love, complicated mystery.. read moreso do you say my writing has "not hypothetical" effect on you ? And as for love, complicated mystery, its good to be tangled in it. Not a necessary fundamental to exist in universe,though. Evolution came about through competition,not love.
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10 Years Ago
hypothetical? your poem is perfect N. It explains your feelings in a very effectively executed inten.. read morehypothetical? your poem is perfect N. It explains your feelings in a very effectively executed intent. I'm only propounding my personal cynicism(s) of this mysterious virtue, love. And love was never tied with "progress" as per se. Love is something everyone finds something common. But everyone don't share it. Only a comparatively negligible cluster (or the stereotypical "pair") share it. Your poem had an instant, memorable effect on me; it lingers moreso. That's the beauty of poetry. There are no norms
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10 Years Ago
stereotypical pair, I like your take on it and ya, everyone is entitled to their opinions, so...
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9 Years Ago
I'd say I was wrong wrong all along. Love does exist. It proves to be the only most elusive find.
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9 Years Ago
Eye opener, huh ? This one ?
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9 Years Ago
Yes indeed, even this..
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Well, you made me write such a long explanation... grrrr...
hehehe... the flow is good and the message of hope is what I admire, that is put forward in such a short piece. Just because someone breaks the connection of two loving souls, does not mean there can be no one else... it should pave the way to a better experience with the next person we connect with.. And you are young, you write pieces that have layered meanings.. I wish that you only improve..
Good luck.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
Yeeaah ! Glad to have you review my work again. You get my message, that is pleasing. And thank you .. read moreYeeaah ! Glad to have you review my work again. You get my message, that is pleasing. And thank you for your wishes. Pleease don't judge me by my age, it is a two digit number . It will never get promoted to a 3 digit number. Judge me by my words, if you will. They get wiser everyday ( leaving back silly ideas and reminding me how stupid I was ).
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10 Years Ago
I try not to judge anyone in any respect :) Keeps me grounded.
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10 Years Ago
Now, that is such a relief !
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An oasis in my heart too! :D Touched to the core. :D
Posted 10 Years Ago
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it's indeed such a warm feel to be through...
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A poem that all can relate to...even me...
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
glad its found relatable
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Brilliant! Explores the precincts of infatuation and carves upon the frontiers of romance and passion. So fundamental, not unlike the sunrise and sunset with no words wasted on sunshine.. You have executed your thoughts with such ease.. Admirable :) Thanks for sharing
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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10 Years Ago
I am happy you liked this. Going through this was not easy , anyways.
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10 Years Ago
yeah lol bottom line: I liked it :D
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This comment has been deleted by the poster.
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10 Years Ago
It couldn't have been (easy).. The poem fairly elucidated your intent to highlight only what was rat.. read moreIt couldn't have been (easy).. The poem fairly elucidated your intent to highlight only what was rationally livening.. an escape from reality? Human intelligence is such a relief ey :)
Love is never easy for those who live by it.. that's because love is a myth, a fairy tale.. it does not exist.. it is the superficial bond that houses and nurtures procreation that's all.. a devious measure by the designers
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10 Years Ago
love can't be superficial, it must be real, I have felt the real pain and where pain was, in guise o.. read morelove can't be superficial, it must be real, I have felt the real pain and where pain was, in guise of pleasure or naked, but it was there.
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10 Years Ago
that's the ugly-beauty of love. It shines light on the positives and hides all the negatives.. I don.. read morethat's the ugly-beauty of love. It shines light on the positives and hides all the negatives.. I don't deny that love can lead to happiness but such an ending (or new beginning?) could only be possible after you have experienced "the lost 'oasis'(-in your words)". To gain, you have to lose. However, if you effect loss and then/consequently gain, the pain will be greatest. So much that you will wish you were never alive to experience such disdain. Your poem has more meaning than you believe. It opens me a new book every time I read it (well, at least in 24 hour gaps) :D cheers!
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10 Years Ago
so do you say my writing has "not hypothetical" effect on you ? And as for love, complicated mystery.. read moreso do you say my writing has "not hypothetical" effect on you ? And as for love, complicated mystery, its good to be tangled in it. Not a necessary fundamental to exist in universe,though. Evolution came about through competition,not love.
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10 Years Ago
hypothetical? your poem is perfect N. It explains your feelings in a very effectively executed inten.. read morehypothetical? your poem is perfect N. It explains your feelings in a very effectively executed intent. I'm only propounding my personal cynicism(s) of this mysterious virtue, love. And love was never tied with "progress" as per se. Love is something everyone finds something common. But everyone don't share it. Only a comparatively negligible cluster (or the stereotypical "pair") share it. Your poem had an instant, memorable effect on me; it lingers moreso. That's the beauty of poetry. There are no norms
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10 Years Ago
stereotypical pair, I like your take on it and ya, everyone is entitled to their opinions, so...
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9 Years Ago
I'd say I was wrong wrong all along. Love does exist. It proves to be the only most elusive find.
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9 Years Ago
Eye opener, huh ? This one ?
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9 Years Ago
Yes indeed, even this..
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Added on June 4, 2014
Last Updated on June 4, 2014
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