Depersonalization.

The soul detaches itself from the body.

I often wondered what being blank felt like,
A blank paper, board or even mind,
Was it nice and serene or loud and unclear? Would it give me peace or only crave for the quiet longer?

A strange sensation rooted in my mind and extended towards the rest  of my body,
In that moment, every cell received the same message; perhaps no message,
Complete silence enveloped my body, feeling serene- at peace finally.

A silence so rare, so pure soon started to make me feel claustrophobic,
I could hear my mind trying to escape, the noiseless screams going unheard by the rest of my cells,
It was too much, too less to take in and all I could see was darkness, the eerie darkness which only made it more quiet.

I could feel myself floating away from myself, losing touch with humanity- my human,
The distance just kept on increasing, only making me more and more numb,
A little scream escaped, too little too late, it went unnoticed by the others and I simply disappeared.

Succumbed to the darkness, I drowned in the darkest of the oceans, no scream no plea for help,
I felt so much at peace, the path so painstakingly slow and noiseless,
The heaven personified goal made the path worth it, quiet but worth it.

……Hush now, the next one is on its way.

Author's Note

Criticism gladly accepted.
Hope you're all doing well.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow... I haven't read your work in a while... what a poem to come back to... really excellent work... I think of two things, how it would be like to go back to childhood, would I still make the same decisions or mistakes. Also I think of how it can be good to be on your own for a while to reboot and better your perspectives on life.

[Simran Kewlani]

Haha thank you! You know the 18-19 year olds, there's always something going on. It was difficult to update this website.
I think that's a really good topic to reflect on, because everytime you'd think of it, you'd change different things.
Thank you so much for the review.
I hope your health is doing well.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts.
I often wondered what being blank felt like,
A blank paper, board or even mind,
Was it nice and serene or loud and unclear? Would it give me peace or only crave for the quiet longer?"
I liked the above lines and the honest thoughts you shared. all of us need quiet time and all of us need human contact. Thank you Simran for sharing your aazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Very interesting

"Succumbed to the darkness, I drowned in the darkest of the oceans, no scream no plea for help,"

Is similar to what happens when persons drown in the ocean and they are not remembered because their whole families drown with them, sort of what happened in the Titanic but without the press, otherwise wouldnt have known about it.

I like it, will put it in favorites, havent read anything as it, written with such confidence, ever, until now

[KWP]

They say to try and touch the untouchable giving it it's own reality, when really there's nothing there at all. Today I was thinking how I would like to spread myself like butter over the veils of the universe - every last millimetre of it, but then I realised the unme is already there.

hello you! Nice to see you would love to hear what's happening your side.

Whilst, you know me, I love the topic of your poem, I would like to see you begin not so much as to lay all your cards out on the table when writing poetry, but start, especially with the subject matter, dealing with the ethereal. Instead of letting the reader know exactly what is happening, leave the door open to interpretation. You can do this uning metaphors.Question - how can your reword the very first line? It's too straight forward and this is not poetry ... think in the language of Rumi or Kabir or Swami Vivekananda ... read their words and notice how the allude to things, it's in the alluding you keep the door right open, and when it's open you can let the magic in.

X

[Simran Kewlani]

That actually makes a lot of sense. I am going to try doing that in the next one. I can always trust you to give me some great advice.
Thank you.
Hope you are doing well.

[Einstein Noodle]

very interesting contrasting of quiet and un-quiet within the human mind and soul ... this is like ones virgin journey within ..scary but at peace .. the question is...will your speaker give it another go?! ;) love this kind of stuff Simran! my cup of Tea .. KWP writes a lot along these lines as well .. the state of "no mind" ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
E.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, E.
That's a very well put description of it. And yes, from what I remember KWP does write along these lines.