We.

Nothing to describe.

We will wait,
Hate, but wait.

Wait for your tears to heat your cheeks,
Wait for your heart to no more beat.

We will win,
Sin, but win.

Win when your tears burn your cheeks,
Win when your heart no more beats.

4th April, 2015.

Author's Note

A failed attempt at rhyming. Probably the worst poem I have ever written.

Reviews

[Arunima]

Why is so much hatred in the poem???

[Simran Kewlani]

Honestly? This was completely random, I was just trying my luck with rhyming. And you can say, may be some part of me, my sub conscious mind was frustrated or seething with anger? Don't know.
Do you like it?

[Arunima]

More or less...

[Simran Kewlani]

Alright. Thank you.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

tiny but meaningful. I enjoyed reading though...

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Skyfall. :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome Senorita!

[Mayank]

To be honest, it's not worst. I liked this better than any of your other work. This is how disintegration should look like. You just need another angle to see it. And yes, F**k the rules.

[Simran Kewlani]

Haha thank you, Mayank.
Bad manners, no swearing on social networking sites. XD

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts. A interesting poem. You left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Coyote. Your reviews are meaningful as always. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

It was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Terrence Chang]

All poems need not to rhyme. Poem is an essence of saying things in your fashion. Don't let yourself down if it does not rhyme. It is quite unique I must say. Keep up the good work and keep posting Simran

[Simran Kewlani]

I agree, but there's no harm in trying so I gave it a shot.
Well, thanks a lot. That means a lot. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you have some very good stuff here ... i think you might revisit this one and express it even more searingly than you have ... by repeating same words we cheat at rhyming ... but sometimes; and for me .. it emphasizes your point ..keep on writing girl!
E.

[Simran Kewlani]

I definitely will. Thank you, Einstein. :)

[R Smith]

never a failed attempt Simran, it rhymes very well and i like the style of it too, you had something to say and no matter how you say it, its the way it comes out that matters, sometimes long poems and sometimes short, they become what they are, you write them but they know when to stop just believe in them, this is a very good poem :)

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Richard . Your words always male me smile. :)

[Saddam]

Two view of angels ans demons.
Great wording dear.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Saddam. :)

[KWP]

well I think it get the message across and in eight lines no less - this is a strong piece with a current topic that unfortunately just keeps getting refreshed with every cycle -

this is not your worst - read it again - you may like it

I was thinking about how to get this theme across myself - without staying on the surface level - I wrote When The Dust Settles We Will All Be Dead - which trickled off theme but please have a read and see if you get where I was going :)

as i said yours is a strong write - I think it's great - more of it X

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, KWP. Getting a review from you, it being positive is always makes me happy. Your reviews are very honest. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

very intriguing and unique...........
if this is your worst.........write more terrible poems...... :P :p
"We will wait,
Hate, but wait. "

"We will win,
Sin, but win."

this was awesome......
i loved it!!!
:)

[Simran Kewlani]

Haha thank you,Pushkar. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome!!! :) :)