STARt Being Honest.

I really don't know how to describe this. Sorry.

She looked at the stars and hoped for a tear free night,

She looked at the stars and asked for the will to continue her fight,

She looked at the stars which made her eyes feel alive,

She looked at the stars and asked for guidance to reach the bright light,

She looked at the stars and questioned if she was liked or disliked,

She looked at the stars, murmured a good night and fell asleep to the screams of her demons in fright.

Author's Note

Hey guys! Sorry I haven't uploaded anything for a while. This is short, so I'm sorry in advance. I wrote it like an hour ago, so I haven't made any changes in it. Criticize at your best. :)
I hope you guys understand the ending.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooo! stark use of contrast and twist at the end .... the darkness is a surprise (not a bad thing) .. night terrors afflict a lot of people ... falling asleep to their screams is not pleasant .. i think the fears are relating to a person not being able to free themselves from the thoughts that precede the terrors .. but .. could be lots of things ;)

E.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you for reading. :)

[xDalliance]

There's good rhyming scheme, and the story line is pretty nicely depicted, however, it lacks your usual punch. Not sure why, though. It's good, not your best. Sorry :(

[Simran Kewlani]

I know. When I try to rhyme something, my usual writing becomes something it isn't. Glad you noticed. Not all of them can be the best. Thank you. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You should never have to describe your poetry,,, people should be left to interpret it… I myself think of how we all question life in those moments of solitude.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

gothic!!! yet lovely in its own way:)

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. :)

[Terrence Chang]

Nice one Simran. It is a good way to tell yourself that you had a nightmare. Kind of remind me of a news reporter who says this "Chain se sona hai to jaag jao". Hahahaha its hilarious.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Terence.
Maybe it is, maybe it's not. At some point what you just said has a similar interpretation to this poem when I wrote this.

[Terrence Chang]

You are welcome Simran

[Bright Ocean Star]

I love it! I'm not sure about the meaning of the ending, but when you pray, you look up at the stars, and higher powers guide and protect you, so that's what I thought maybe you were going for. Who knows. I just love anything stellar and starlight! Very nice write!

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Ocean Star. :)

[Luna Zerimar]

I really, really, REALLY liked this one.

The pictures you painted are beautiful.

I could picture myself in this one. 100 Rating.

[Simran Kewlani]

WOW! Okay, thanks a lot. 100 is like so good for me.
Thanks a lot for reading, you have made you freakin' happy right now, you've got no clue.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Wow, I like this. It really puts an image in the readers mind. Brilliantly done.

Kaze~

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Kaze. ;)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Mayank]

The ambiguity of the last line is a worth, because readers can think over it, the things you want your readers to listen but they cannot decipher.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Mayank. I actually wanted the readers to be confused in the end because they won't be able to decipher what it means. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

this is perfect.......no need for changes.....
beautiful writing....
i loved it!!!!
:)

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Pushkar. :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome!!! :) :)