I honestly wanted to say something, but I'm stuck between my thoughts and my words and the distance from one to the other is, literally, thought from action. Because I know the immensity of the humanity in each fear, as contradictory as it may seem.
Nice writing.
She breathed for the last time,
She saw through her eyes for the last time,
She smiled a real smile for the last time,
And she let go of life for the first and last time.
brilliant ending. I am loving it...
She breathed for the last time,
She saw through her eyes for the last time,
She smiled a real smile for the last time,
And she let go of life for the first and last time...
Great job here
I honestly wanted to say something, but I'm stuck between my thoughts and my words and the distance from one to the other is, literally, thought from action. Because I know the immensity of the humanity in each fear, as contradictory as it may seem.
Nice writing.
I gulped down few sips of water this time after reading this, I wonder how many of such people exists who really don't care and think that nobody will pick them up or whatever. I don't even feel sorry for them...
We all have different opinions. They find it helpful. We don't. How it though? Did you like the poem.. read moreWe all have different opinions. They find it helpful. We don't. How it though? Did you like the poem?
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Yes, I liked it. I liked the way you have represented somebody's feel. There was a twist of 'Smile' .. read moreYes, I liked it. I liked the way you have represented somebody's feel. There was a twist of 'Smile' which could have been sign of hope but it is twisted to more darker phase. I liked the pattern, the first and last stanza written in 4 lines and middle of them in 2.
10 Years Ago
Thank you. I just think that the first and last stanza have much more to talk about than the ones in.. read moreThank you. I just think that the first and last stanza have much more to talk about than the ones in the middle. So, I often make it a point to keep it this way. It's easier and doesn't break off the trail of the pattern. :)
This is haunting, tragic that some people feel they need to harm themselves in order to feel, or in some cases to take away the pain, which is usually done in someone else's name. I had a friend who self-harmed, she explained the pleasure of it, or more of a release, but I still have a hard time comprehending it, there's too much pain to deal with already without scaring ourselves. Excellent Simran, the sentiment of this one shone through....although in a darkly colored hue of crimson.
I don't think it's fair to hate them, it's a coping mechanism, they can't live without, it's like an.. read moreI don't think it's fair to hate them, it's a coping mechanism, they can't live without, it's like any other crutch...it becomes addictive. Was my pleasure hon. :)
10 Years Ago
I don't particularly hate them, but I just disike their way of getting rid of their pain.
10 Years Ago
I understand, it's hard to watch a friend suffer, especially when they're the ones inflicting the pa.. read moreI understand, it's hard to watch a friend suffer, especially when they're the ones inflicting the pain....
Which famous Poet are you?I got Emily Dickinson - Which famous Poet are you?You're like Emily Dickinson. Emily suffered from bouts of depression and melancholy. As a very shy person, she even had tr.. more..