Happiness.

The bright shine of the sun,

Hit the iris and changed my view,

Positivity surrounded me all around,

Killed the negative and buried it forever,

Making sure it never came ever,

Gained all the positive vibes,

Bravely smiled at life,

Knives were all gone and tears had all dried,

Because now, was the time to smile.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Such a Beautiful Painting
of Elegant Poetry Simply
Beautiful.



I loved these Stanza's lines.



The bright shine of the sun,

Hit the iris and changed my view,

Positivity surrounded me all around,


Thank you for sharing. Blessings. kindred poet

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank youu! xx

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome. Blessings. kindred poet

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I really love the positivity of this poem… fr me it speaks metaphorically of someone finding their inner faith… regardless if I am wrong or right it is a lovely piece of writing.

[Simran Kewlani]

Actually, that is the correct view about this poem. That is exactly what I was thinking while writing it. :)
Thank you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well I am glad I read it correctly.

[KittyVenus]

this made me feel happy and sad at the same time... no other poems have made that happen to me... wow you are a really good writer

[Simran Kewlani]

Well, thank you. This poem means a lot to me. (:

[KWP]

this is a very nice poem :)
you paint a lovely picture indeed
have you thought about how it could be written in metaphors?

:) xx

[Simran Kewlani]

no. not really.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree with Leslie. A splendid poem though...:)...........

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. (:

[Sami Khalil]

u are welcome...:)...................

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, with the exception of vibes, which ( I feel) is too modern for the otherwise more classical style of this ; good poem though

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you.
Okay. (:

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing poem, nicely written.

Kaze~ :-D

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you Kaze! (:

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome my friend. :-)

[melissa]

Awesome poem i can't wait to read more

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you Melissa! (:

[melissa]

Your welcome

[Saddam]

Positivity surrounded me all around,
Killed the negative and buried it forever.

Positively think make big difference. Excellent write.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you SSADD!

[A. Amos]

Wonderful piece of write and ending you nailed it my friend, simply epic...