Inevitable

i wanna break every clock--the hands of time can never move again. [we could stay in this moment for the rest of our lives.]

 

 

i’m sick of these charades,

she whispered,

and laid her head on my chest.

i traced patterns in her skin,

and thought of how i didn’t want to wake up again.

 

that night, i cried myself to sleep.

 i dreamed of capsized boats,

a cottage with butterfly wings nailed to the walls,

and a canary who had lost his song.

i was rocked to sleep by the sound of the waves

in endless  car crashes.

 

i sat by my desk, shocked that i was actually writing again,

disgusted because it was still trash.

i’d glace at her every so often,

and watch her rock the baby to the beat of the waves.

 

the sun was bleeding into the ocean,

and we stood, watching the massacre.

my arm was around her,

and we were complete.

a little part of a little prison.

we kissed as the last of daylight died.

 

but then i broke when i remembered that none of this was reality.

Author's Note

lack captialization is purposeful.
let me know what you think?

Reviews

[kickstart gal]

This seems like a very sad, intimate poem; I don't understand the ending, but I think that that's part of why the poem is so personal -- I can tell it means something important to you. The first stanza contains great vivid imagery -- I can almost feel the brush of fingertips on skin.

[Larry Dyson]

sounds like what my mother is thinking inside her alzheimers mind...I hope it is that pretty...ty

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I could feel the romance, and then the sadness kicked in at the end of the poem! Well written, the imagery was super!

[Brianna Brie]

Hmmm...it has been a while since a love poem made me cry. This got me right in the...oh well you know. Love the capsized boats, butterfly wings, canary, and the bleeding sun.Great job!

[ATG]

This was a sad poem that was well written. The details of the various imagery were a welcomed additon to the poem. There were romantic tones to the poem that seemed out of place, but this made the sad tones a little stronger instead of dulling them which in my opinion made the poem a stronger piece of writing.