Last Summer

the falling leaves remind me how your hair fell into your face. the falling leaves remind me how you fell from grace.

The falling leaves look like drifting snow,
and as I look into the winter without you,
I wonder how you're doing,
I wonder what you're doing without me.
The morning sun is slanting through the trees,
and I wonder which particular beam
is illuminating you, as you sleep,
curled like one of Spring's unfurling leaves
on your bed.

 

The days are like falling leaves,
bitter and brittle, and so I am--
ready to crumble at the first strike.
The hours drift by like falling leaves,
like the leaves you brushed from your hair.
You left me lying on the ground,
cold and alone, as empty as the hand
that held yours, moments before.
You left me lying there for hours
to break into pieces in peace.

 

The days are icy and lonely,
and they remind me of how it isn't,
so I remember the summer,
and how I memorized every curve of your body.
I miss the moments
when you let your guard down.
I miss the moments when
your serious eyes would lighten,
when I took you by surprise,
when you would smile, laugh,
throw your arms around me.
I miss those carefree moments,
as I drove you anywhere you wanted to go,
where you'd throw your head back
and sing your freedom song.
But summer's long gone.

If there was ever a war for my heart,
you won, because I was always yours.

3rd

Dec 22, 2010

• Autumn is ending
• Last Summer

 

Honor award

Jan 3, 2011

• Unnoticed & Untouched
• Last Summer

Reviews

[Coffee Vampier]

This is very well written I enjoyed the read!

[Never Good Enough]

"memorized every curve of your body"...what woman wouldn't want to hear that!

[Star Cross]

This poem spoke to me in many different levels- love, joy, regret and sorrow. Emotions that a lot of readers can relate. You have a natural talent to pull the readers towards the next sentence with your words- something only few can really do successfully and fluently.

[Daniel88Batson]

That was really something. Well done!

[Clever Forever]

This is overall just a beautiful piece. I love it!

[Larry Dyson]

beautiful simile and metaphors....

[Larry Dyson]

alliteration and assonance..and the analogy of winter leaves..softly poetic.. I like your prose...

[miSS LEaf]

awesome. just awesome.

[Brianna Brie]

You have an amazing way of describing what you want to say. It offers the reader such a visual means of relating to your words. This is yet another wonderful poem by you.

[Chuck]

love love love this, you are an amazing writer - you can make anyone "see" exactly what you are saying.. its beautiful.